张马沙 - 2008-5-5 8:40:00
You are the blue sky
I then will be a small bird
In your colorful clouds
Fly
You are the spring wind
I then will be a flute
In your warm breathe
Sing
You are the sea
I then will be a small boat
In your rocky waves
Toss
You are the fertile land
I then will be a grass sprout
In your profuse richness
Grow
You are the garden
I then will be a bee
In your sweet pistils and stamens
Suck and brew
You are the rivulet
I then will be a small fish
In your tinkling stream
Swim
You are the fire
I then will be a moth
In your hot blaze
Sacrifice
童天鉴日 - 2008-5-6 13:59:00
You are the fire
I then will be a moth
In your hot blaze
Sacrifice
钓月 - 2008-5-10 11:08:00
worm breathe
There's a mistake.:D
周道模 - 2008-5-12 9:38:00
有时押韵，有时未押，最好统一。
结构单一，意象不新。