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《目光之远》中翻英

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《目光之远》中翻英

《目光之远》文/ 朱枫
In my Sight

无法看到距离三厘米以内的物品
I fail to see anything in three cm.
也无法看清十公里以外的东西
And even anything beyond ten miles
我的眼睛，活着有限的距离
My eyes live in narrow distance
一方池水倒影它自已的天空
As a pool of water inverts its own sky

近不如一只小小的蚂蚁
My sight isn’t as good as an ant
远不如一只高高的苍鹰
Not as a high goshawk
在天与地之间，我活着一个生命的短
Between the heaven and earth, I, a life, short live
像影子要活出太阳的光芒
As the shadaw lives like rays of sunlight

浮世梦半生醉醒已千秋

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回复：《目光之远》中翻英

提给朱枫兄。感谢firefly 先生。

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Between the heaven and earth, I, a life, short live

最喜欢这句了,

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回复：《目光之远》中翻英

You didn't translate the exact meaning in Chinese. They
should be:

title: Distance in eyesight

I fail to see anything within three cm
Nor even anything beyond ten miles
My eyes function in limited distance
As a pool of water has its own inverted sky

I can't see as near as an ant
Nor as far as a flying hawk
Between heaven and earth, I live only a short life
As the shadow lives as long as there's sunlight.

A foreigner can understand the above.
The Chinese original is not correct in some lines.

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原帖由 海外逸士 于 2007-10-21 2:22

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You didn't translate the exact meaning in Chinese. They
should be:

title: Distance in eyesight

I fail to see anything within three cm
Nor even anything beyond ten miles
My eyes function in......

此译本韵味更足.
谢谢指导,
我们得好好学习.

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