楼主: 彭纯廉
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[短诗] 等月亮出来 |
发表于 2021-10-16 10:42:27
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个人觉得这里较顺理成章,月亮落下地平线,这是主线
就像童话吹到另一个页码,前后才吻合。应该镜头不晃
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发表于 2021-10-16 10:42:32
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