叶浪：我有一个强大的祖国

童天鉴日

我有一个强大的祖国

I Have A Strong Motherland

by Yelang    from Guangming Daily

□我有一个强大的祖国
作者/叶浪
那是一张熟悉的脸
是我痛失亲人后
看到的最亲切的笑脸
她眼里闪着泪花
话里充满着力量
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
那是一张陌生的脸
是我埋在瓦砾下
看见的最勇敢的脸
他撬开了残垣
搬走了巨石
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
地动天不塌
大灾有大爱
这一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
那是一张美丽的脸
是我躺在病床上
看见的天使的脸
她包扎着我的创伤
驱走了我的恐惧
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
那是一张慈祥的脸
是我奔离教室前
看到的最镇定的脸
她为了自己的学生
成就了自己的永恒
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
地动天不塌
大灾有大爱
这一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
那是一张年轻的脸
是我在排队长列里
看到的最急切的脸
她为了灾区的伤员
献出了自己的殷殷鲜血
那一刻，我感到自己
有一个强大的祖国
那是一张忙碌的脸
是我在抢险救灾中
看到的最疲惫的脸
她眼里布满血丝
来不及探询家人的安危
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
那是世界上最可爱的脸
是家乡地震后
不曾面见的男男女女的脸
她远在他乡海外
温暖的目光却紧紧地
落在了我的身上
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
地动天不塌
大灾有大爱
那一刻，我感到
我有一个强大的祖国
□ I Have A Strong Motherland
By Yelang
It is a familiar face
The most cordial face I've ever seen
After I lost my families
Her eyes flashing with tears
Words full of strength
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
It is a strange face
The bravest face I've ever seen
When I was buried under the rubble
He prizes the fallen wall
And removes the huge rocks
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
The earth quakes but the sky won't fall
Great love comes against major disaster
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
It is a beautiful face
The angel's face I've ever seen
When I was lying on sickbed
She bandages the wounds with love
Warm drive away my fear
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
It is a kind face
The calmest face I've ever seen
Before I flee from the classroom
For her students
She sacrifices herself
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
The earth quakes but the sky won't fall
Great love comes against major disaster
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
It is a young face
The most anxious face I've ever seen
While I was waiting in long line
For the wounded in the disaster areas
They donated their warm blood
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
It is a busy face
The most tired face I've ever seen
On the front line in disaster relief
Her eyes are bloodshot
It is to late to ask about her families
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
It is a most lovable face in the world
Faces of men and women I've ever seen
After the earthquake
Although far in overseas
Warm eyesight is closely
Fallen on me
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
The earth quakes but the sky won't fall
Great love comes against major disaster
At that moment, I feel that
I have a strong motherland
【资料来源】光明网、新浪网及百度。
（5月14日作于成都市抗震救灾指挥部,作者为成都市林业和园林管理局副局长）

安城

看了电视，问好童天

童天鉴日

时态跟句式有些问题，请大家尽管提出来

周道模

第一段：eyes前加  Her ?
许多句子的时态是否该用过去时？

童天鉴日

谢谢
我再想想

firefly

加her 对的
用现在时态是我给童天的馊主意 跟他无关 呵呵
当时我想时态有点乱 过去的事情也有用现在时表达的
就干脆以现在时为基本时态得了
但现在听周先生再这么一说 好像又觉得用过去时作基调好点
只是里边有几个这一刻那一刻的
不太符合时间逻辑 我都被闹晕了

宛城卧龙

很震撼心灵的一首诗