[原创]【走近乡间晚约时春天】

原野牧夫

[这个贴子最后由原野牧夫在 2005/06/19 01:01am 第 4 次编辑]<br><br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 【走近乡间晚约时春天】<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;——浅读临屏金奖作品觅雪嫦晴《四月的徘徊》<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;原野牧夫<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; 这个春天或许来的太迟也太晚，一次又一次相约，四月却并没有让自己走进一种期待中浪漫或是浪漫中期待。惟有一种甜甜的思绪飘摇在徘徊之中……<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; 很多时候我都不会太刻意的去写任何文字，或刻意地解读他人的任何文字，总是害怕一种刻意会把所有的思绪打乱，会让文字成为一种打磨或肢解，也会让自己从心头飘出的一缕缕清新坠逝于烟尘与迷梦之间，让一些美丽在稍纵即逝过往成一种淡忘。而觅雪嫦晴就是这样有些固执地带着她的《四月的徘徊》轻轻走进了我的深夜，一杯咖啡飘着几缕清苦的香气轻缠绕在案前，让我不得不也轻轻走近这次“晚约”。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;夕阳撒下满地的羞涩<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;四月 小桥发出了邀请<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;我把晚约挂在新车上<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;车辐条就频频发射电波<p> &nbsp; &nbsp;乍看，这是一个春天的黄昏。“我”羞羞涩涩地随着新车前往赴约，“我把晚约挂在新车上/车辐条就频频发射电波。”心情既激动不已却又忐忑不安，一路上看那乡间的小桥流水，夕阳徘徊在四月雨意缠绵的天空，云彩久久不肯飘坠下来，一眼望过去，却是满地落下它那一缕缕同样羞涩的红晕。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; 一个小伙子羞答答地从麦地里走来。“我”是那样掩饰不住自己，久久的期盼终于从那茂密的思念里走出了他的锄把，让一次“晚约”挂在那里。一对恋人不时的低着头却不时地透过麦棵偷看着对方，目光频繁的远远相撞让一种心情悬浮着不安。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;你从茂密的麦地走来<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;把晚约挂在了锄把上<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;让所有偷看的悠悠目光<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;统统撞在麦棵上<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; 很快车就开进了麦地里。轻风和麦浪扑面而来，一种近乎狂热的心态让自己感觉到生命和生命的临近，但两张陌生的面孔让自己不得不抗拒着自己和对方，而对方似乎也还沉浸在当初相约的悠悠心思里头。目光也就开始变得悠远……<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;临近地头了 你还在相约<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;我却甩过头去<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;徘徊着 &nbsp;看其他风景<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;没想到 &nbsp;抛起的长长发丝<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;被麦棵巧取成<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;得意的辘轳<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; 为此，“我”也开始迟疑，“甩过头去/徘徊着 &nbsp;看其他风景。”开始让目光徘徊在那一排排卖弄风景的麦垄里的青稞上面。无奈长发飘起在风中，止步不下的是身下坐着的车轮，辘轳吱吱呀呀地响着，两颗年轻的心还是渐渐在靠近对方，透过文字让我们看到的是：一种渴望，一种激越，一种迫切和得意。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;你不顾一千只窥视的眼睛<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;舍身 &nbsp;上演英雄救美<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;美丽的乡间晚约啊 <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;变成了一场甜蜜的救难<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; 远远近近都是人影不时在麦垄上四处晃动，已经顾不得那些善意期待的目光和偷窥的眼睛，也顾不得那车的轱辘是否坠入麦海的风浪里，只希望和心的爱人相拥抱在一起，只期待“你不顾一千只窥视的眼睛/舍身 &nbsp;上演英雄救美”。多浪漫而美好的“晚约”啊！那是一种甜蜜爱情的向往和生命相依的期盼……<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; 在短短的二三十分钟临屏时间里，作者以她文字特有的轻灵和委婉，亲切而又美丽的语境中的叙述，已经让我们为她的“晚约”而深深陶醉。读到这里，我已经完全沉浸在觅雪嫦晴邀我同往的晚约时黄昏美景。“夕阳无限好，只是近黄昏”，与其说是她把“夕阳”这样一种背景来作为春天赴约的铺垫，我不由得也随着诗人深掩的伤感暗暗发出心底里的无限感慨。如果作为一首参赛作品，我想我们已经无法再有较多的挑剔和获得金奖文字的遗憾。这个四月终归是一个爱情徘徊的季节，是一个情感郁结和甜蜜交错的雨意缠绵的季节。还好，徘徊只是那么短暂的一刻，幸福却是永远！<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; 祝福你，觅雪嫦晴！<p><br>【附】<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;四月的徘徊<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 觅雪嫦晴 <p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 夕阳撒下满地的羞涩<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 四月 小桥发出了邀请<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 我把晚约挂在新车上<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 车辐条就频频发射电波<br> &nbsp; <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 你从茂密的麦地走来<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 把晚约挂在了锄把上<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 让所有偷看的悠悠目光<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 统统撞在麦棵上<br> &nbsp; <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 临近地头了 你还在相约<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 我却甩过头去<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 徘徊着 &nbsp;看其他风景<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 没想到 &nbsp;抛起的长长发丝<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 被麦棵巧取成<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 得意的辘轳<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 你不顾一千只窥视的眼睛<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 舍身 &nbsp;上演英雄救美<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 美丽的乡间晚约啊 <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 变成了一场甜蜜的救难<p><br>

醉东风

在笑看人间论坛读了，在这里看到很高兴，评的好。

古剑

拜读,问好

原野牧夫

下面引用由醉东风在 2005/06/19 08:43pm 发表的内容：<br>在笑看人间论坛读了，在这里看到很高兴，评的好。<br>

<br>谢谢醉东风再读，问候！

原野牧夫

下面引用由古剑在 2005/06/20 06:34am 发表的内容：<br>拜读,问好<br>

<br>谢谢一读。请多指点！问候！

蒋书余

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