[原创]读《知非老人诗赋小辑》的一点感受（八月古体诗词明星作品专评）

楚成

[这个贴子最后由楚成在 2005/08/21 12:29pm 第 3 次编辑]<br><br><br>读《知非老人诗赋小辑》的一点感受<p>文/楚成<br> &nbsp; &nbsp;<br> &nbsp; &nbsp;读知非老人诗赋，感觉最深的是举凡山水、养生、琴棋书画、钱财、亲情，以及现代人生、花鸟虫鱼等都能有感而发，而又言之有物，随类赋彩，读之神韵生动。其诗中饱含哲理，兼以平淡之语出之，令读者受益匪浅。初在中国诗歌学会网古词新韵论坛上读其《纪游烟雾洞》，便惊为“高手也！”后读其《论养生》、《钱魔》、《琴、棋、书、画》诸作，感觉诗人不仅象是一位画家，更象一位饱经沧桑的哲学家，信手涂抹，便成天籁。作品不仅琳琅满目，而且色彩缤纷，读之如行山阴道上，既应接不暇，又让人过目难忘，读后更让人掩卷深思。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp;请读诗人的《纪游烟雾洞》，“仙人羽化是何年，卧榻依然在此间。门外藤帘飘紫气，洞中药炉起青烟。云光每共朝霞吐，雾霭常随夜月绵。恨我无缘奉杖履，红尘一洗作诗仙。”诗人巧妙地运用形象思维和浪漫主义的手法把烟雾洞之烟、之雾描写得令人恍入仙境，如入世外桃源，令读者顿生出尘之感，成羽化登仙之愿。王国维在《人间词话》中说：“能写真景物、真感情者，谓之有境界，否则谓之无境界。”此组诗之境界就在于虚实相生、诗中有我、我中有诗，我既是烟、是雾、是石竹、是天接柱、是莲花潭、是仙女洞， 而此间景物又何尝不是我的化身呢？ &nbsp; 天人合一的思想和庄周梦蝶的精神在这里得到了很好的再现。诗人真情流淌，造化神奇如此，诗人得江山之助，笔鼎千斤，绣口张开，如吐珍珠。“枝横惟带风烟绕，叶劲不来雨露栖。”、“常带洪濛藏古气，更无斧凿露雕痕。山中侧柏长为友，世上桃花不是邻。”、“未许飞香招蛱蝶，哪能池水养蛟龙。朱衣闪烁光摇水，翠盖低徊雾绕蓬。”超凡脱俗，如入仙界。整组诗从烟雾着笔，写山川胜景，慨叹造化神功。令威化鹤、萧史乘龙之神话远矣！而亘古不变的是青山依旧在，几度夕阳红。是诗人对尘世的热爱，对生命的眷恋，对理想的执着，以及对烟雾洞藏匿深山，不为人识的忧叹。知非老人对山水深情如此，何尝又不是“知非”世事后的醒悟呢？“红颜岂是人间偶，丹心维求古洞棲。不灭不生多自在，无忧无虑度干枝。”将莲花潭比喻为一绝代红颜，诗词中以花喻红颜司空见惯，但诗人却将红颜喻为隐士，就不多见了。结句见出得道之音矣！“不灭不生”、“无忧无虑”只有山水才可匹配，而凡人难以达到。凡人虽难以至圣贤，心却向往之、仰慕之。从诗中我们可以窥探出诗人对家乡山水的一片赤诚，和对佳山秀水不为人知的无可奈何的喟叹。如《仙女洞》“清风习习山前过，尤带当年步虚声。”、“一自蟠桃招宴去，只今惟见水东流。”组诗最后以 “古洞藏身不计年，黄庭内景探真诠。<br>採来灵药调龙虎，练出丹砂养凤鸾。岩泉跳珠仍撒手，山花垂果尚摩肩。惟怜过分贪求者，苦海行舟泛铁船。”收束全篇，首尾摇相呼应。结句告诫世人，为人处世应如此山水一样，不求闻达于世，但求心安即福。全组诗如一串珍珠闪烁着迷人的光辉。不仅饱含哲理，而且形象生动，寓无穷的人生感慨于其中。诚如眸横秋水点评：“工稳流畅，层次分明，亦山亦水亦人，纵游网络律者似先生者屈指可数，我辈望尘莫及。”读此组诗，我们仿佛看到知非老人伫立在烟雾洞前，眼前千山万壑，流云异彩，奇景胜迹莫不在心中翻腾，老人与山水生情，山水亦对老人有情，相对两含情，而后老人心有所思，有所动，将眼前云烟幻化成胸中云烟，才催生出这一幅幅奇绝人寰的文字图画。我们又仿佛感觉知非老人是一位看透红尘，深谙禅、道的达者，更像是一位深藏民间的隐士，正恬然自得地坐在家乡山川前的任一松树下，眺望飞鸿，手挥云彩，而自己在不知不觉中也慢慢化成了一棵松，一棵日日夜夜守卫着家乡山水的松树。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp;<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;读诗人的《追远赋》，感觉知非老人不仅学识丰富，而且阅历深厚，洞悉世事，能将孝道的子孙所有的共同感情蕴之于平淡的语言托出，诚非易事。诗人就是善于将人人心中所有，而人人笔下所无的感情用诗意的语言道出，引起大家的共鸣，这篇赋正是如此。赋体难写，更难工，何况是仿清代考试赋体，难上之难就非同小可了。虽然我们不提倡，但对老人驾驭汉文字的才能和对祖辈的一片真情，不能不由衷令人赞叹！赋终下线，犹余音袅袅。言有尽而意无穷也！任何文字在真情面前都是苍白和无力的。正如李长空兄所点评：“本赋追忆祖父母两代的事迹,当年艰苦与今日昌隆自成对比,情真意挚,感人心魄.在语言表述上,通篇赋采用联语的形式,凝练美好,舒展流畅.。”对祖辈的追忆感怀，其情可感可叹，一蔬一饭来之不易，何况日久天长？如同河蚌养珠，看似无意，其实无时不在滋润、哺育着下一代。莫言世道真情少，追远赋中滋味长。诗人将人人都具有的感情用赋体道出，更具冲击力和震撼力，读来泪湿衣襟。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;总之，读知非老人的诗赋，给我感觉深刻的就是淡泊中蕴神奇，浪漫中含哲理，豁达中藏忧思。老人凌云健笔，词彩丰瞻，想落天外，寓意深刻。不仅精鹜八极，神游古今，而且俯仰宇宙，洞查世事。诗人的《论养生》组诗，虽如李长空所言“大手笔.人生与社会,两者合一,娓娓到来,给人启迪。” 余亦认为“此非徒养生之道也，亦是处世之道也！”但在肯定的同时，比如：“斗角勾心求富贵，穷奢极欲享安宁。”等诗句，《钱魔》组诗中的“有钱方得鬼推磨，那管雷公抱不平。” 、“ 知识初开即爱钱，手中钱到便心欢。”等句子，令人感觉稍显宋人理教味道重了点。蒙长空兄所托，余不辞才浅力拙，为推荐《知非老人诗赋小辑》获得《中国诗歌》8月份明星作品，信笔敲来，虽挂一漏万，却也是略尽绵薄之力。如有不当，还请知非老人赐教为盼！此篇文章只是给读者架起一座阅读知非老人作品的桥梁，老人的作品博大精深，如一座宝矿，读者们有兴趣还是自己去宝山一看吧！<p><p><p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; <br>

古剑

读出自己的感受,好!

晓曲

辛苦楚成了，握。以此作为古体诗词明星作品专评的开典！

赵福治

好，确实好。

李长空

&nbsp; &nbsp;&quot;我们仿佛看到知非老人伫立在烟雾洞前，眼前千山万壑，流云异彩，奇景胜迹莫不在心中翻腾，老人与山水生情，山水亦对老人有情，相对两含情，而后老人心有所思，有所动，将眼前云烟幻化成胸中云烟，才催生出这一幅幅奇绝人寰的文字图画。我们又仿佛感觉知非老人是一位看透红尘，深谙禅、道的达者，更像是一位深藏民间的隐士，正恬然自得地坐在家乡山川前的任一松树下，眺望飞鸿，手挥云彩，而自己在不知不觉中也慢慢化成了一棵松，一棵日日夜夜守卫着家乡山水的松树……&quot;,楚成兄的评如同他的诗一样,想象丰富,生动形象,饱含情意&#59;<br> &nbsp; &nbsp;&quot;读知非老人的诗赋，给我感觉深刻的就是淡泊中蕴神奇，浪漫中含哲理，豁达中藏忧思。老人凌云健笔，词彩丰瞻，想落天外，寓意深刻。不仅精鹜八极，神游古今，而且俯仰宇宙，洞查世事&quot;,诗好,评亦精佳!<br> &nbsp; &nbsp;为一组诗写评已难,为数组不同体裁/内容的诗赋写评更难,而评能够写到如此精佳,而用时如此之短,长空敬服.楚成兄辛苦了!<br>

李长空

&nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 知非老人诗赋小辑<p><br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;《论养生》<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（一）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 六贼猖狂日夜攻，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 养生无计任牢笼。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 荣华似网随心陷，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 名利如胶到眼蒙。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 享受殊途迷意志，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 穷通差路乱行踪。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 谁能稳足波涛上，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 独泛轻舟涉大同。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; （二）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 延年口号响当今，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 尽作宣传纸上文。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 斗角勾心求富贵，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 穷奢极欲享安宁。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 造成劳瘁伤中息，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 徒把清斋了外因。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 虽有灵丹无用处，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 空悲沧海看珠沉。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; （三）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 古人长寿论包罗，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 传到而今效不多。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 只谓形骸成机杼，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 故将精髓任蹉跎。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 阴阳承制心交泰，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 喜怒宁谧胆熄波。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 当于未来思巩固，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 不偏不易致中和。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（四）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 色即是空难久留，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 从来淡泊可忘忧。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 神安玄府血浆固，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 虑净灵台气泡稠。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 面色晶莹火在窟，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 眼光明亮水盈沟。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 果能无妄安行止，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 自有春光满玉楼。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（五）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 一生为富尽驱驰，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 走肉行尸自不知。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 想入非非阳已困，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 思穿杳杳阴将疲。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 六淫鼓动沉疴出，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 五志飞腾寿命移。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 欲得长生须返旆，。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 调神御气保天倪。<p>楚成：此非徒养生之道也，亦是处世之道也！好诗！<br> 李长空：大手笔.人生与社会,两者合一,娓娓到来,给人启迪。<br>………………………………………………………………………………………<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 《钱魔》<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（一）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 世间何物最凶残，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 巨毒伤人莫过钱。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 手无分文必伏地，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 腰缠万贯可通天。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 坠名败节皆因爱，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 舍死忘生总为贪。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 心血殷殷成逝水，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 灵魂深处是谁牵。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（二）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 鲁褒作论号钱神，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 我道钱神是魔君。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 闯入心扉心化铁，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 流经眼角眼生钉。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 志迷未许分清浊，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 意乱焉能识重轻。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 多少高官如草芥，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 皆因失足陷金城。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（三）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 难功难守是钱关，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 进退皆非成两难。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 富贵朝朝享安乐，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 贫穷日日受饥寒。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 何人愿住清风岭，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 无处不寻珍宝山。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 一旦突围能有路，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 焦头烂额岂知还。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（四）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 何事栖身到大城，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 发财原不在乡村。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 各行各业相追逐，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 或多或少共经营。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 尔诈我虞能蚕食，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 明敲暗夺可鲸吞。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 有钱方得鬼推磨，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 那管雷公抱不平。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（五）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 知识初开即爱钱，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 手中钱到便心欢。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 贪婪不念他人苦，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 抢骗惟思自己甜。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 用尽机关如魑魅，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 使干伎俩似鹰鸇。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 谁将毒素留精髓，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 长把恶根向胎传。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;（六）<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 扶危济困乃钱功，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 得可为官失便穷。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 崔烈输铜权在手，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 买臣覆水恨填胸。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 夫妻相爱皆由汝，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 父子成仇亦为公。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 古往今来谁不爱，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 今朝相爱更成风。<p>白开水：讽敛之举！很有道理。<br> 兮梅子：阅历与秋风同时，音韵与碧泉同声。<br> 眸横秋水：巨毒伤人莫过钱,钱无罪,罪乃人也,性使然。<br> 李长空 ：深刻。<br> 寸草晨露：警辟!<br>…………………………………………………………………………………………………<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 《琴》<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;欲陶心性到空灵，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;月下花间静鼓琴。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;铁骑银瓶成格律，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;高山流水见知音。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;调和气候阴阳秘，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;转化思维喜怒平。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;一曲解愠知不易，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;令人千古想南薰。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 棋<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;昔日观棋有烂柯，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;心驰神往乐如何。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;九天变化风云动，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;八阵纵横鸟蛇多。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;高下经年频蕴酿，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;输赢终日屡摩娑。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;红白两奆施妙算，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;一波才定又生波。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;书<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;千古书家王右军，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;银勾铁划早知名。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;胸无浩气笔锋拙，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;心有光明手势轻。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;虎跃龙腾生壮丽，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;鸾飞凤舞显精神。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;病夫体态成何用，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;外貌虽佳不动人。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;画<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;每开画谱夜难眠，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;纸上风光别有天。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;岩下古藤栖碧草，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;洞中石阁锁青烟。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;山飞水走藏机制，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;绿浅红深点自然。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;遗恨此生少妙悟，<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;不知何处得真诠。<p>李长空：诗情妙意尽在此。<br>…………………………………………………………………………………………………<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;《纪游烟雾洞》<p> &nbsp;序：大巴山绵延二千余里，山水奇迹多不可数，此奇景地处四川旺仓大两，洞中烟雾终年不散，洞外有五花血藤，披拂岩畔，春日开花，如挂珍珠门帘……，洞中景观，奇绝人寰，竟埋没深山，可胜惜哉！今作纪游八首，以誌终身不忘焉！<p>仙人羽化是何年，卧榻依然在此间。 &nbsp; &nbsp;长生传诀有崆峒，尽日思量如梦中。<br>门外藤帘飘紫气，洞中药炉起青烟。 &nbsp; &nbsp;只见当时留手迹，不知何处觅仙踪。<br>云光每共朝霞吐，雾霭常随夜月绵。 &nbsp; &nbsp;令威化鹤成杳杳，萧史乘龙总空空。<br>恨我无缘奉杖履，红尘一洗作诗仙。 &nbsp; &nbsp;惟有青山依旧在，娇阳犹带满天红。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 石 竹 &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;天接柱<br>漫说石林世上稀，此间石竹最称奇。 &nbsp; &nbsp;昔曾挺立嶂中流，不意深山作隐侯。<br>枝横惟带风烟绕，叶劲不来雨露栖。 &nbsp; &nbsp;一贯心传通性理，两乘妙法悟清修。<br>一片幽篁展藓袖，数茎稚笋解毛衣。 &nbsp; &nbsp;无声无息垂乾健，若实若虚接坤柔。<br>问君修到空心否，却在何年返太虚。 &nbsp; &nbsp;佇看功行园满日，飞身直上玉京楼。<p>峨眉龙竹爱修行，此处潜来作幻身。 &nbsp; &nbsp;才可擎天志未成，甘居岩壑养长生。<br>常带洪濛藏古气，更无斧凿露雕痕。 &nbsp; &nbsp;头冲宵汉为谁屈，脚踏坤维只自身。<br>山中侧柏长为友，世上桃花不是邻。 &nbsp; &nbsp;此日分离因祖炁，他年既济在元贞。<br>屏除尘嚣归净界，任他风雨落缤纷。 &nbsp; &nbsp;外形虽隔难终隔，一到天机便相承。<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 莲花潭 &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;仙女洞 &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; <p>仙花三树立潭中，靓影婷婷显秀容。 &nbsp; &nbsp;迹相昭然事可寻，洞中仙女早飞身。<br>未许飞香招蛱蝶，哪能池水养蛟龙。 &nbsp; &nbsp;苔封藓闭丹床罩，火冷烟消茶灶门。<br>朱衣闪烁光摇水，翠盖低徊雾绕蓬。 &nbsp; &nbsp;几条松根穿石壁，一株仙草插金瓶。<br>交媾坎离修大道，丹成自可入瑤宫。 &nbsp; &nbsp;清风习习山前过，尤带当年步虚声。<p>水清如镜照双眉，绚出仙容别有姿。 &nbsp; &nbsp;谁家少女爱清修，看破红尘此处留。<br>形影相辉同琸约，花萼交焕映涟漪。 &nbsp; &nbsp;吐故纳新迎日月，练行服气度春秋。<br>红颜岂是人间偶，丹心维求古洞棲。 &nbsp; &nbsp;三花聚顶神归阙，五炁朝元光满楼，<br>不灭不生多自在，无忧无虑度干枝。 &nbsp; &nbsp;一自蟠桃招宴去，只今惟见水东流。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 古洞藏身不计年，黄庭内景探真诠。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 採来灵药调龙虎，练出丹砂养凤鸾。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 岩泉跳珠仍撒手，山花垂果尚摩肩。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 惟怜过分贪求者，苦海行舟泛铁船。<p>楚成点评：真高手也！得山水之性灵！<br>眸横秋水点评：工稳流畅，层次分明，亦山亦水亦人，纵游网络律者似先生者屈指可数，我辈望尘莫及。<br>朱枫点评：红尘一洗作诗仙.高手！<br>…………………………………………………………………………………………………<p> &nbsp; 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[这个贴子最后由知非老人在 2005/08/23 12:40pm 第 1 次编辑]<br><br> &nbsp; 深谢楚成先生之精辟点评，先生真大才也！<br> &nbsp; 先生对老夫的诸多认可，真有受宠非轻之感，其实老夫只是一个文字爱好者而已，其间有四十多年没提过笔，于今梦醒，只是想来《中国诗歌》共同学习、奉献一点雅俗，与大家共赏……<p> &nbsp; 再次谢谢楚成先生、谢谢李长空先生以及各位……<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 四十年来学哑聋，于今习惯已成功。耳门不敞塞犹石，洞口虽开隔似钟。<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 四季飞花随左右，一年流水任西东。心中自有珠常在，或暗或明一点通。

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诗词写的好，评也能得其妙处<br>细细品位老人的诗就如同长辈的谆谆教导<br>祝老人长寿<br>