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发表于 2019-4-14 23:05:22
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谢谢潘老师!
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发表于 2019-4-14 23:24:50
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这一首,意浅韵硬,弹性不足,灵动不够,I唯两三个句子凑合哈。
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发表于 2019-4-15 06:40:41
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谢谢吴老师!
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