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[小诗] 悬念,抑或必然 |
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发表于 2019-7-1 08:49:49
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吴兄慧眼!这两行是我后来加上去的,实际上我也纠结,总感觉不顺畅和多余,听兄这么一推敲,决定去掉这两行,旁观者清嘛!敬茶,问候!
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