Yeah, you have a valid point there, however, the original only says coloured or colourful or varicolored, so in terms of yishi's translation theory, I, as a translator, can or should only render what poet says in his poem.
Having said that, I agree with you, it is better to simply say 'coloured clounds' in lieu of 'varicoloured'.
As for 'over' or 'beyond', I think both are all ok. Actually, it means fly over and beyond, but it might turn out to be too long, I deem.
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