【古诗英译】上高侍郎（唐）高蟾

海外逸士

第二句異想天開。當然可以改成﹕
The red apricot planted against clouds at the side of the sun.
第四句加個詞﹕
Never complains to east wind for not yet blooming.
不過這樣一改﹐英文讀上去就不那麼好了。

Louisa

海老译文第二句的确会让人误读。
用by 和against 会被认为是被动语态。
第二句伤人脑筋，试试其他出路：
the red apricot is planted under the clouds near the sun
or
the red apricot leans against clouds near the sun.

海外逸士

開始時我只用LEAN﹐後來一看還有個“栽”字﹐所以加了PLANT一詞。後來再用LEAN
ON 顯得纍贅﹐就直接用了AGAINST。從前後文看﹐不可能誤解的。因為SUN是不能
PLANT的。自娛君是開玩笑。他老是這樣的。日子長了就知道﹐他的話基本上是抬杠
玩的。

自娱自乐

海外逸士 发表于 2011-2-8 00:26
開始時我只用LEAN﹐後來一看還有個“栽”字﹐所以加了PLANT一詞。後來再用LEAN
ON 顯得纍贅﹐就直接用了A ...

記住我的原則﹕確切性 + 雙向考慮﹐即終極語言的可讀性。


Well, yishi, did you really think short and light before you rendered it? You are an all-round "gaoshou", aren't you? People like me will always look up to you, for you are such a role model.

Please keep in mind "wrong is wrong, rationalization won't help at all"