《惜牡丹花》- 白居易

自娱自乐

惜牡丹花
白居易
惆怅阶前红牡丹， 晚来唯有两枝残。
明朝风起应吹尽， 夜惜衰红把火看。
Pity for Peony
By Baijuyi
The red peonies before the steps render me crestfallen,
As evening comes, there are only two unwithered on site.
Yet next morning the wind will surely blow to spare none,
To pity the fading pink, a torch lit up to watch them at night.
V2.
The red peonies before the steps render me crestfallen,
As evening comes, only two are in unwithering plight.
Yet next morning the wind will surely blow to spare none,
To pity the fading pink, a torch lit up to watch them at night.

自娱自乐

As evening comes, there are only two unwithered on site.
As evening comes, only two (are) in unfading plight. - better?

天路客

原帖由 自娱自乐 于 2009-9-18 21:15:00 发表
As evening comes, there are only two unwithered on site.
As evening comes, only two (are) in unfading plight. - better?

yes, the latter is better.

天路客

im confused by the author name----Bai Juyi? Bai Jvyi?

自娱自乐

Thanks for your input!

海外逸士

the latter is better. no need to put in "there are".
惆怅 = crestfallen?

梓煜

呵呵，唉，一知半解

青衫来客

on sight or in sight? I think the latter is better.

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