译作：Selima Hill 的《让我们别再提及爱》

靳乾

让我们别再提及爱

原作：Selima Hill
译者：Tanya

别再提及我们的爱，行吗？
——别说我其实深陷其中，难以自拔，行不行？
别提及你那肿胀的面目，就像朵木兰花；
还有那袋类动物，
让我渴望的爬入，使双唇优先抵达，
它那小巧，呆钝的袋囊；
别提及百万瀑布飞流坠落
——好似爱是那通过潮湿隧道的迷宫滴滴答答
才能进入那隐匿湖底的玻璃穹窿，
我期盼，我祈祷，我在里面永远不被揪出。

漆黑的夜晚梦见你卧室被鸭子塞满。
而你带着捣碎麦片与炒蛋的味道困在其间。
一些鸭子正在孵卵而不能起来。
而你各色的妻子用她们手指
如鸭喙一样伸向你私密的地段。
而你横躺在床上，好似男人本不该有的姿势。
嘎吱嘎吱碾压玻璃声惊醒了我，我惊愕
仿佛整个事件都是关于瓦解毁灭，
水一股脑地倾注，随着鱼儿们冲出
用他们低下的口饮啜发着咕噜咕噜。
Don’t Let’s Talk About Being In Love

Selima Hill

Don’t let’s talk about being in love,OK?
-about me being in love, in fact,OK?
About your bloated face, like a magnolia;
About marsupials,
Whose little blunted pouches
I’d like to crawl inside, lips first;
About the crashing of a million waterfalls
- as if LOVE were a dome of glass beneath a lake
entered through a maze of dripping tunnels
I hope and prayed I’d never be found inside.

At night I dream that your bedroom’s crammed with ducks.
You smell of mashed-up meal and scrambled egg.
Some of the ducks are broody,and won’t stand up.
And I dream of the fingers of your various wives
reaching into your private parts like beaks.
And you’re lying across the bed like a man should’t be.
And I’m startled awake by the sound of creaking glass
as if the whole affair’s about to collapse
and water come pouring in with a rush of fishes
going slurpetty-slurpetty-slurp with their low-slung mouths.

作者简介：
    Poet Selima Hill was born on 13 October 1945 in London, England and grew up in rural England and Wales. She read Moral Sciences at New Hall, Cambridge (1965-7). She regularly collaborates with artists and has worked on multimedia projects with the Royal Ballet, Welsh National Opera and BBC Bristol. She is a tutor at the Poetry School in London, and has taught creative writing in hospitals and prisons.
    Selima Hill, a poet of the late twentieth and twenty-first centuries, has been described as a risk-taker, and her poetry as seriously comical.  She deals with sexuality, erotic love, and disturbed mental states, all from a female point of view.  Her poetry volumes are often comprised of very short poems in a sequence spoken by a single voice.  Her imagery is surreal and sometimes whimsical.

自娱自乐

原帖由 靳乾 于 2009-11-1 14:10:00 发表
还有那袋目动物，
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‘袋类动物’- 会不会好一点呢？

靳乾

恩。。是呀，有袋目动物，太学名化了，用袋类好。

周道模

being in love 比“爱”还要丰富些吧？ 原诗有一些隐晦的暧昧的情节、细节。

青衫来客

水一股脑地倾注，随着鱼儿们冲出
用他们低下的口饮啜发着咕噜咕噜。
and water come pouring in with a rush of fishes
going slurpetty-slurpetty-slurp with their low-slung mouths
一群鱼儿随着灌进的水蜂拥而入，用它们低垂的嘴巴咕咕噜噜啜弄着
不是很了解她也没有读过她的作品，不过从诗的写法看，这是一个喜欢用象征性的物象，来隐晦的地表达自己的思想的作家。因此一些关键字句和意象的理解，是打开深藏着作者写作意图之门的钥匙。

靳乾

原帖由 周道模 于 2009-11-3 8:44:00 发表
being in love 比“爱”还要丰富些吧？ 原诗有一些隐晦的暧昧的情节、细节。

周前辈说得没错，翻译时也感觉诗中的人物在情感与情欲中颠簸流离，这“爱”太复杂。

靳乾

谢谢青衫前辈给我打分~:sun:
您的评论让我找到更确切的视角来观察此诗人的作品。

周道模

地段？  部位？

齐寒

I hope and prayed I’d never be found inside.
我期盼，我祈祷，我在里面永远不被揪出。
这句意思似乎刚好相反？

靳乾

如何更正比较好呢？请赐教。。。:sun:
恩，我翻译的另一首《绳》的诗，也想请齐寒君看一下，给挑挑毛病。^_^