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歸去來兮！田園將蕪胡不歸？既自以心為形役，奚惆悵而獨悲？悟已往之不諫，知
來者之可追；實迷途其未遠，覺今是而昨非。舟搖搖以輕揚，風飄飄而吹衣。問征
夫以前路，恨晨光之熹微。乃瞻衡宇，栽欣載奔。童僕歡迎，稚子候門。三徑就荒，
松菊猶存。攜幼入室，有酒盈樽。引壺觴以自酌，眇庭柯以怡顏。倚南窗以寄傲，
審容膝之易安。園日涉以成趣，門雖設而常關。策扶老以流憩，時翹首而遐觀。雲
無心以出岫，鳥倦飛而知還。景翳翳以將入，撫孤松而盤桓。歸去來兮，請息交以
絕游。世與我而相遺，復駕言兮焉求？悅親戚之情話，樂琴書以消憂。農人告余以
春及，將有事乎西疇。或命巾車，或棹孤舟。既窈窕以尋壑，亦崎嶇而經丘。木欣
欣以向榮，泉涓涓而始流。羡萬物之得時，感吾生之行休。已矣乎！寓形宇內復幾
時？何不委心任去留？胡為惶惶欲何之？富貴非吾願，帝鄉不可期。懷良辰以孤往，
或植杖而耘耔。登東皋以舒嘯，臨清流而賦詩。聊乘化以歸盡，樂夫天命復奚疑。
1) Returning Home
Let me go back home!
My fields will get desolate, “園”漏譯
Why not go back home?
Since I myself let my heart be a slave to my body,
Why should I be so full of melancholy?“獨”字漏譯
I am aware the past cannot be retrieved,
but the future can be repaired.
In fact I have not gone too far astray.
Lightly my boat was rowed and rowed, “rowed”非輕揚之意
and gently my gown by the wind was up rolled. 把衣之下襬吹得飄飄然﹐不是
捲起來
I asked the passengers about the way ahead,
complaining the dawn was still faint over my head.最後三詞多餘
Discerning my humble hut,
I quickened my steps with delight.
Servants to welcome me all came out,
and children were waiting at the gate.
I found the garden paths were covered with weeds
while pines and chrysanthemums still survived.
I carried my children into the house by the hand, 攜幼﹐應是最小的。不能
是children複數。
glad to see on the table wine cups were laid .
I raised the cup and drank the wine with my hand. “壺”字漏譯。最後三詞
多餘。
watching my garden trees with pleasure. “怡顏”沒譯好
I leaned against the southern window, “寄傲”漏譯
I was content with my small hut, to be sure. “審”“容膝”都漏譯。最後三
詞多餘。
In walking everyday in the garden I took pleasure.
A gate was provided, but it was always closed.
I walked with a stick, and took a rest whenever I felt tired.最後四詞原文
沒有﹐不需加上
Occasionally I raised my head to look at the distant cloud, 未必看雲。蛇
足。
which had no intention to float out of the mountain side. “雲”字應放這
句裡
Even birds knew to return to the woods when they were tired. 原文沒說還哪
裡
The day was getting dark and the sun began to set in the west side. 嚕囌
I caressed a lone pine tree and lingered around.“撫”想來只是把手按在上
面。不會真的撫摸松樹。
Let me go back home
and cease to make social contact with the world outside.不最確切
Since world customs are at variance with my temper,
why should I go out to seek fame and fortune?“焉求”未必指名利
I should be pleased with my relatives' familiar looks, “情話”不是looks。
and I can amuse myself with music and books.“消憂”漏譯
Peasants will tell me spring is coming, 這句該用從句﹐不須will。
and they will be busy at farming. 將有事于西疇的應該是作者﹐並接下句。錯
譯
I may ride in a curtained cart
or row a lonely boat.
I may follow a winding stream quiet and serene to arrive at an open valley
clean. 嚕囌
I may also follow a rugged path to reach a hill-top at length. 非“經丘”
之意
Trees are thriving and vigorous,
While springs flow murmuring and look marvelous.最後三詞多餘
I marvel; everything comes out at the right time,不應用分號。動詞應帶賓語。
and I lament: my life will draw to a close at any time.
Let it be! Let it be﹗
How long can I live in the universe?
Why not decide my fate according to my own wish?人不能自己決定命運的。錯
譯
Where do you head for in such a hurry against your wish? 最後三詞多餘
Since wealth and honors are not my wish,
and the fairyland is out of reach,
I only wish to travel alone on a fine day;
or my stick on the roadside lay, and go to the field to cut hay.植杖不是
lay﹐耘耔不是cut hay
Or climb up the eastern hill high To relieve a long sigh.“嘯”不是sigh
Or sit by a clear river side, composing poems worthy of my pride. 未必
“坐”。最後四詞蛇足。
Let me abide by the law of nature to lead a life of nature.“歸盡”漏譯
Let me submit to the will of Heaven and be content with my fate forever!
“forever”多餘。
(譯者 未知) 除不妥處外﹐讀來鬆散﹐不簡潔。
2) 題缺
Ah, homeward bound I go! Why not go home, seeing that my field
and gardens are overgrown? Myself have made my soul serf to my body: why
have vain regrets and mourn alone?
用homebound即可。overgrow只是長滿之意。沒“蕪”的確切意思。
Fret not over bygones and the forward journey take. Only a short distance
have I gone astray, and I know today I am right, if yesterday was a complete
mistake.
“來者”實際指未來歲月﹐非journey之意。
Lightly floats and drifts the boat, and gently flows and flaps my gown.
I inquire the road of a wayfarer, and sulk at the dimness of the dawn.
Then when I catch sight of my old roofs, joy will my steps quicken. Servants
will be there to bid me welcome, and waiting at the door are the greeting
children.
Gone to seed, perhaps, are my garden paths, but there will still be the
chrysanthemums and the pines! I shall lead the youngest boy in by the land,
and on the table there stands a cup full of wine!這兩段應該是一路上的情景﹐
不需用將來時態。
Holding the pot and cup I give myself a drink, happy to see in the courtyard
the hanging bough. I lean upon the southern window with an immerse satisfaction,
and note that the little place is cozy enough to walk around. “seed”或
是weed之誤。寄傲不是satisfaction。原文沒有walk around之意。
The garden grows more familiar and interesting with the daily walks. What
if on one ever knocks at the always closed door! Carrying a cane I wander
at peace, and now and then look aloft to gaze at the blue above. WHAT句不
確切。on或是no之誤。遐觀未必看天。
There the clouds idle away from their mountain recesses without any intent
or purpose, and birds, when tired of their wandering flights, will think
of home. Darkly then fall the shadows and, ready to come home, I yet fondle
the lonely pines and loiter around. 將入﹐指日將入﹐不指人將回家。
Ah, homeward bound I go! Let me from now on learn to live alone! The world
and I are not made for one another, and why drive round like one looking
for what he has not found?
Content shall I be with conversations with my own kin, and there will be
music and books to while away the hours. The farmers will come and tell
me that spring is here and there will be work to do at the western farm.
LET句不確切。he has not found﹐原文無此說法。消憂不是while away the hours。
原文沒說農人來告。“來”字多餘。
Some order covered wagons; some row in small boats. Sometimes we explore
quiet, unknown ponds, and sometimes we climb over steep, rugged mounds.
原文中無主語之句﹐應該都指作者自己。不是some。壑不是ponds之意。
There the trees, happy of heart, grow marvelously green, and spring water
gushes forth with a gurgling sound. I admire how things grow and prosper
according to their seasons, and feel that thus, too, shall my life to its
round. 原文沒有happy of heart之意。
Enough! How long yet shall I this mortal shape keep? Why not take life as
it comes, and why hustle and bustle like one on an errand bound? WHY句非
原文確切意思。
Wealth and power are not my ambitions, and unattainable is the abode of
the gods! I would go forth alone on a bright morning, or perhaps, planting
my cane, begin to pluck the weeds and till the ground.
Or I would compose a poem beside a clear stream, or perhaps go up Tungkao
and make a long-drawn call on the top of the hill. So would be content to
live and die, and without questionings of the heart, gladly accept Heaven's
will. 原文無of the heart之意。
(林語堂) 應該不會有理解之誤及表達不確切之處。只能下惋惜之評語﹐免致遭譏。
3) Going Home太簡單﹐沒了氣勢
Going home! The land will soon lie in waste.
Why shouldn't I go home?
Since I willingly let my mind be enslaved by my worldly desires, 不簡潔﹐
不確切
Why should I feel remorseful and sad?“獨”字漏譯
Knowing that what I did in the past cannot be redressed,
I can still retrieve my mistakes in the future;兩句不確切
I have not gone too far on the wrong path,
And now I am on the right path of today, not the wrong one of yesterday.
The boat is moving swiftly ahead with the wind blowing on my garment,
I ask the way from a passer-by and feel sad that there is yet only a gleam
of early dawn.
The shabby house is in view in the distance,
I run happily towards it.
The boy servant comes forward to welcome me,
My youngest son is also waiting for me at the gate.
Though the paths in the garden have nearly been decimated,
The pine trees and the chrysanthemums are still there.
Holding the hand of my child, I walk into the house,
There on the table is wine prepared.“盈樽”沒表達
I take up the wine vessel and drink alone,
Enjoying the view of the trees in the garden.“怡顏”漏譯
I lean against the south window to indulge in my lofty meditations,“寄傲”
沒表達好
Contented with the ease of living in a small house。
I find pleasure in walking in the garden every day,
Though there is a gate, it is closed all day.
With a staff I roam around, and rest whenever I feel the need,
And at times raise my head to look at things in the distance.
Clouds drift out aimlessly from behind the mountains,
Birds will return to their nests when tired.原文沒提到nests
It grows dim as the sun sets,
I linger, stroking the trunk of the solitary pine tree.
Going home! I will cut off all human relations.“絕遊”漏譯
Since the world is at odds with me,
What should I seek by driving out in a carriage?
I will have intimate talks with my kinsmen,
And forget my miseries by playing on the harp and reading books.
Country folks will come to tell me that spring has come,原文無come to tell之
意
And that farm work will begin in the western field.
I would either ride on a cart, or row a small boat,
Sometimes following a clear and deep stream that leads me to a valley,
Sometimes walking along a rugged and bumpy path that takes me over a hill.
Trees are growing boisterously,
Spring water is flowing smoothly.
I envy all things that enjoy the blessings of nature
And feel miserable that my life will soon be over.
Alas! How many more days can I live on this earth?“寄形”沒表達好
Why not take life as it is?
Why do I worry? What am I aspiring to?“何之”漏譯
I do not seek wealth and position,
Nor do I desire to live with fairies and gods.後半譯得不好
I would go out alone on a fine day,
To cultivate farmland with my staff laid aside.植杖不是 laid aside
I would shout aloud on the top of the eastern hill,
And compose poems by clear streams.
Welcoming death as part of the vicissitudes of life,
I would be contented with what is willed by Heaven.
What else do I want?原文沒有此句。
(羅經國) 除了不確切外﹐大都句子不簡潔。
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