【英语诗歌】The Aroma of Apples -- In Memory of Steve Jobs

Loon

The Aroma of Apples
-- In Memory of Steve Jobs
Six and fifty autumns,
when once again,
multicolored leaves strew
the ground, the sky turns
generous, inhaling a breath
of sweetness
you announce your final journey -
a sudden, graceful fall
leaving an apple
a nice curvy bite.
What crunching!

自娱自乐

Nice, very emotive indeed!

Loon

Thanks ZYZL for reading and leaving your comment.
How's everything?

童天鉴日

n久未见 问好老师

Rhapsodia

Very nice poem! Wittily composed. How are you these days, dear Loon?

Loon

n久未见 问好老师[/quote]
童天好！
论坛上人人平等，都是老师，都是学生。
对了，这里都成了打招呼，寒暄的地方了。太静了。

Loon

Very nice poem! Wittily composed. How are you these days, dear Loon?[/quote]
谢谢晚枫来读及评论。这类诗不好写，特别是对主人公没有透彻的了解，只有截取一个小侧面，希望能写出主人公的一些特点，避免写的泛泛，雷同，那样很可能很多人都适用。写的肤浅，只为表达敬意。
I'm fine, thanks. And you?
Loon

周道模

抓住特点，写得生动。写英诗，非要学他们的”转句、跨节“？

冰默樱娘

欣赏学习，问候 Loon 君。

Loon

抓住特点，写得生动。写英诗，非要学他们的”转句、跨节“？[/quote]
周先生问得有趣。不一定非要学，但一定要懂。我曾见过有人翻译，因为不了解英文诗歌的这一特点，意思完全弄拧了。写中文现代诗，也不非得写格律诗吧。同理。谢谢来读及评论，问好。