【原创英诗】Peace

peter7805

Peace
Oh peace
Do I know you?
Tell me who the hell you are
I think you are a stranger to us
The air we breathe
Is full of the smoke of warfare
The water we drink
Is mixed with the people’s blood bare
The sun is darkened by the cloud
The trees are not green any more
The land is cursed to be a nightmare
The birds’ feathers are burnt in the air
Oh peace
You are a dream of our broken hearts
You are such a happy place that is far
The killing never stops from the old times till now
The crying of women and children ever lasts but how
It is the beasts inside humans that come out
And the weapons are made to be sold out
And the bombs are exploded aloud near the house
And the lives are vanished to see the god
And the souls are wandering but lost
And upon the civilization is a huge frost
Oh peace
Tell me where you are
Now I am sad and going to die
Do I have to fight to the last breath?
Believing that you are the thing that’ll be there
Oh peace
Now let me die with my eyes gazed
And I will wait and see it take place

宛城卧龙

问候
Now let me die and gazed with my eyes
And I will wait and see that take place


gazed，时态，这里是不是应该用 现在时态？
see that take place: that 在这里应该是引导宾语从句，后面TAKE PLACE 应指 发生 之意、但我读后没看懂英文的表达意思，是不是想表述——我等待着 看着未来将发生什么。假如是此意，THAT是否该改为WHAT.
是否将最后一行解释一下？

peter7805

问候
Now let me die and gazed with my eyes
And I will wait and see that take place
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谢谢卧龙！向您问好！

Deepblue

啊，一个失去了信念和追求，正在被疯狂和魔性吞噬的灵魂。啊，迷失的魂，回来！