以心换心 诗歌翻译点评 吕志鲁

戴盛莲

              以心换心
       菲利普•悉尼(Philip Sidney 1554—1586)英国诗人

                 吕志鲁译

  点评

            原作从头到尾都是对真爱的直述，译作用"以心换心"及“金银”等形象语言转译。另外，“情真意切,意切情真”和“如金似银, 如银似金”这种颠倒重叠的形式增添了浓厚的诗意。
　　
　　我的真爱与我以心换心,
　　一个情真意切,
　　一个意切情真,
　　这个交易最为公允:
　　我的真爱与我以心换心。

　　那颗心让我们彼此难分,
　　这颗心引导他的灵魂,
　　一个如金似银,
　　一个如银似金:
　　我的真爱与我以心换心。
　　
　　My True-Love

　　My true-love hath my heart, and I have his,
　　By just exchange one for another given:
　　I hold his dear, and mine he cannot miss,
　　There never was a better bargain driven:
　　 My true-love hath my heart, and I have his.

       His heart in me keeps him and me in one,
　　My heart in him his thoughts and senses guides:
　　He loves my heart, for once it was his own,
　　I cherished his because in me it bides:
　   My true-love hath my heart, and I have his. 　　

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