The Ruth of the Human Being

周道模

The Ruth of the Human Being
                             By William Zhou   
                                 
The history of civilization is very long and very proud to each personal life, but after all , the human being is still in his childhood if we look through his history of living. The human being now is having mournful mistakes just like each person does in his childhood.
Wars are the lowclass and bloody crimes which the human being has been lasting for thousands of years. It’s the appetence for wild animals to injure the different kind of life. But the human being slaughters the same kind of his own, just due to the different ideas of cultural values or going after one’s country advantages. Just because of the infantility of childhood, as soon as a new science technology has been invented, some people will use it to make weapons. Even religions can be used to defend those who belong to one’s own faction and attack those who don’t, and used to plunge people into an abyss of misery, such as the marching of the Crusades to the east.
In the battlefield where bombs fall like rains, and in the battlefield where buildings fall down and bridges are broken, and in the battlefield where people die like  burning grass, who is cheering for his private interests? Who is drinking to his own battle achievements? At the time when the country is broken and the refugees are as many as  grasshoppers, can any international organizations or any countries prevent the happening of the human being’s calamity?
How many years will it take for the human being to step out of the truculent and mournful childhood?
                                                                                                            March 30th, 2003

白沙

辛苦了，感谢诗友！

海外逸士

BEING是可數名詞。所以要麼前面用A﹐或後面加S成複數。當然動詞也作相應變化。
加THE使成物類名詞也行。第二個USED前需有AND。
RAINS。在最後兩個IN THE  BATTLEFIELD之間﹐需用AND。
評﹕語法錯誤較少。但說理的通順性不夠。論說文較難寫﹐最好先學寫記述文﹐或
故事。

firefly

建议after all 后面加上逗号

firefly

beidges--->bridges

张马沙

这是某个中学生的备考议论文习作吗？
错别字不少：除了beidges 之外，还有expedience； orgernizations ；
语法方面，多处用the不当，如 the burning grass；the grasshoppers等

周道模

谢海外、白沙、萤火虫、张马沙诸君的斧正！