《觀黃山日出得句》--bilingual

海外逸士

《觀黃山日出得句》
天上染作坊﹐打碎五色缸。遂將素綾雲﹐染成彩錦裳。\r
我欲煩織女﹐為我繡紅妝。將去贈相知﹐禮輕情意長。
Watch the Sunrise on the Yellow Mountains
In the heavenly dyehouse
Vats of five colors broken
So dying the white satin clouds
Into colorful brocade dress
I want to ask the girl weaver
To embroider a red dress for me
I’ll give it to my beloved
The trivial gift shows my deep love

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2008-10-9 6:08:00 发表
《觀黃山日出得句》
天上染作坊﹐打碎五色缸。遂將素綾雲﹐染成彩錦裳。\r
我欲煩織女﹐為我繡紅妝。將去贈相知﹐禮輕情意長。
Watch the Sunrise on the Yellow Mountains
In the heavenly dyehouse
Vats of five colors broken
So dying the white satin clouds

好，赞一个！
Mount Huang
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Mount Huang, also known as Huangshan (Chinese: 黄山; pinyin: Huángshān; literally Yellow Mountain), is a mountain range in southern Anhui province in eastern China. The area is famous for its scenery, sunsets, peculiarly-shaped granite peaks, Huangshan Pine trees, and views of the clouds from above.[1] The area also has hot springs and natural pools. Mount Huang is a frequent subject of traditional Chinese paintings and literature. Today, it is a UNESCO World Heritage Site and a popular destination for both domestic and foreign tourists.[2]

海外逸士

Thanks for telling me.

自娱自乐

Not at all, buddy! :Z

firefly

我欲煩織女﹐為我繡紅妝。將去贈相知﹐禮輕情意長。
要是我写就落入俗套了：
我欲煩織女﹐為我繡紅妝。奈何阻重深，母娘又牛郎:D

firefly

Vats of five colors 会不会误读为带有五种颜色的缸？
要是我就这样翻译：jar filling/containing five colors

海外逸士

maybe, but I use vats in plural.
yours has definite meaning, but the word jar should be in plural.  besides, jar is
much smaller than vat.
thanks for the suggestion.

firefly

in plural. yeah, i mistook it

自娱自乐

原帖由 firefly 于 2008-10-11 13:00:00 发表
in plural. yeah, i mistook it

:Q

海外逸士

now, I change OF to WITH.
“奈何阻重深，母娘又牛郎”。這跟前文沒關係。再細讀一下。