[汉英新诗] 雪 儿 啊

自娱自乐

原帖由 周道模 于 2009-1-2 21:53:00 发表
run out of 比 escape from  好。前者动感强，后者“信”也，但不生动。

Well, I see what you mean. hehehe, 动感强, okay, another verbal phrase might meet your requirement, hehehe
run away (from) ...
At any rate, you are the author that has the final say on what you like to say or do.

自娱自乐

hehehe, just jump out of my mind, another one - run out on

Well, FYRO

周道模

thanks!

what's the difference between the" run out of" and the "run out on"?

自娱自乐

原帖由 周道模 于 2009-1-3 9:54:00 发表
thanks!

what's the difference between the" run out of" and the "run out on"?

run out on = leave someone

Anyway, this one is not good for it.

Well, you must take your 'immurement' into account / consideration when you do your translation.

What is immurement?

Immurement is a form of execution where a person is walled up within a building and left to die from starvation, dehydration, or in some cases, insanity. This is distinct from a premature burial, where the victim typically dies of asphyxiation.

Well, logical thinking, is it easy for a person to run out of such a confinement, not to mention'run out of' often means 'used up'

Therefore, I believe 'escape from' is the right choice. As for 动感，hehehe, okay, why not say 'break out'?

火骏

问好

周道模

谢火骏! 对英语又作了一些修改.

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问好火骏！新年进步！感谢炼诗人的读赏和鼓励！