《誤佳期》bilingual

海外逸士

《誤佳期》(擬古小詞) 春染堤邊柳綠﹐陌上雙燕相逐。誰家少女折桑枝﹐素手白如玉。 步過小橋東﹐更在清溪北﹐竹林深處響繅車﹐記取是儂屋。 Spring dyes green the willows by the dike Two swallows chase each other over the fields Who is that lass picking at the mulberry boughs Her pretty hand as white as jade Walking to the east of the small bridge Further to the north of the clear creek In the depth of bamboo grove sounds the spinning wheel Remember that’s where is my home.

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-2-1 1:01:00 发表

1. Her pretty hand as white as jade
2. Remember that’s where is my home.

呵呵呵，逸士，牛年大吉！
pretty hand as white as jade, 可惜啊，她是个独手女，呵呵呵 (well, just a raillery)
Remember that’s where is my home. ----why not 'where my home is? for cadence?

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-2-1 1:01:00 发表
Spring dyes green the willows by the dike

why not 'dyes the willows green by the dike'? Does it sound better?
We usually say "she dyed her hair blonde".

自娱自乐

yishi, I enjoy your emotive poem. hehehe, 姜还是老的辣 - the old ginger packs a real punch. :P

周道模

意见自娱自乐都提完啦。
这位女子还是“引郎入室”的嘛！不叫“误佳期”喔！

自娱自乐

原帖由 周道模 于 2009-2-1 11:23:00 发表
意见自娱自乐都提完啦。
这位女子还是“引郎入室”的嘛！

俺没意见。只是灌灌水而已。不然的话，这论坛可是太清静了。<img src=" alt="" />

海外逸士

pretty hand as white as jade------because she used only one hand to pick the mulberry leaves
Remember that’s where is my home.-------reads better
Spring dyes green the willows by the dike------because the phrase by the dike qualifies the willows, so better put directly behind it

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-2-2 5:42:00 发表
pretty hand as white as jade------because she used only one hand to pick the mulberry leaves

Remember that’s where is my home.-------reads better

Spring dyes green the willows by the dike------because the phrase by the dike qualifies the willows, so better put directly behind it

O, I see, hehehe, her other hand is disabled, right? hehehe
Well, that is only your opinion or taste.
qualifies? did you actually mean 'modify'?

海外逸士

qualify = modify  here.
you can imagine that her other hand is carrying a basket to hole the leaves.
use your imagination. hehehe

自娱自乐

Well, sure, I can also imagine she has to have her other hand amputated due to frostbite. <img src=" alt="" />