【汉英微型诗】 富人宴诗人

周道模

富人宴诗人

有美女侍酒如春……

富人说：诗歌有多么神圣

诗人说：金钱是多么美好

2009-01-19
11：10

The moneybags entertains the poet

Beauties accompanying them with wine

“Poetry is so blest!” the moneybags saying

“Money is so nice!” the poet saying

自娱自乐

有美女侍酒如春……Some beauties accompanying like Spring
周先生，译文似乎与原文有出入。

周道模

是的，想学习非马他们，自己的作品可以意译，不逐字翻。

海外逸士

侍酒------serving wine,  not accompanying
if you say "serving wine" like spring,  don't know what it means.
so when anyone writes poetry, make it understandble. that's of the first importance.
don't learn from those so-called poets who write  garbage that no one can understand.  poetry must express the strong feelings of the poet. that's what makes it a poem.

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-2-2 5:50:00 发表
侍酒------serving wine,  not accompanying
if you say "serving wine" like spring,  don't know what it means.
so when anyone writes poetry, make it understandble. that's of the first imp......

Ditto, well said!

周道模

谢海外和自乐！
serving wine是服务员倒酒吧？我这里是指“陪酒”，请问怎么翻？

炼诗人

很有意思  简洁深刻   :Z

宛城卧龙

认真学习了
看到 对侍酒 的讨论  
我也凑凑热闹
侍 一词可以翻译为
1wait upon  2 attend upon  3 serve 服侍之意  

周道模

谢“炼诗人”的鼓励！
谢卧龙的点子，这里有细微处难翻：
美女（不是服务员）要敬酒，也要喝酒，还要笑语如歌地劝酒。
又改了下第一句，请方家指点。

自娱自乐

美女侍酒 --- 其实就是 female escort / harlot 对不对啊？