《织女怨》- 晚春轩主

自娱自乐

织女怨



(晚春轩主）


茫茫河汉隔，灵鹊暂分忧。
一夕身相拥，终年泪独流。
天恩虽浩荡，旧梦太温柔。
仙界无难事，缘何少自由？

The Weaving girl’s Sorrow

Although separated by the endless Milky Way,
Empathetic magpies briefly help ease the sorrow.
Hold each other tight for one night,
Yet tears shed alone all year long.
The celestial benevelence seems vast and mighty,
But the old dreams are so tender so nice.
Nothing impossible for the Fairyland,
Nevertheless, why so little freedom?

向逸士学习，不押韵了。:P

金沙文字

1.The Spinning Damsel and the Herd Boy
2.Weaving maiden
（供参考)

自娱自乐

原帖由 金沙文字 于 2009-7-23 17:59:00 发表
1.The Spinning Damsel and the Herd Boy
2.Weaving maiden
（供参考)

谢谢！

青衫来客

哈哈哈，好。与海老俱进。精炼，准确。灵鹊就是magpie，empathetic 画蛇添足了。

自娱自乐

哦，是吗？
那你的 Zealous magpies 呢？
哈哈哈

青衫来客

:D :D 表示热情，我没想起这个字，想起我也用了。哈哈哈，问候！给我挑错，不然不放过。

自娱自乐

The Weaving Girl’s Sorrow
Albeit separated by the endless Milky Way,
The magpies briefly help ease our sorrow.
Hold each other tight for one night,
Yet tears shed alone all year long.
The celestial benevelence, vast and mighty,
But the old dreams, so tender so nice.
Nothing impossible for the Fairland,
Nevertheless, why so little freedom?

青衫来客

I keep thinking that the poem without ryhme is just like a untrained girl wallking on the T--Shape, and what is more, a beauty made of stone and spring without flowers .

自娱自乐

hehehe, yeah, like a glass of water, heehehe
Albeit to be separated by the endless Milky Way is a plight,
The empathic magpies momentarily come to ease the sorrow.
We can hold each other tight in our chest for only one night,
Yet when alone, all year long our tears constantly down flow.
Have to add far too many words ...hehehe

青衫来客

It is just my  personal understanding and preference. I know it is the case that sometimes we feel uneasy when not rhyming, no matter translating or writing a poem. I know you can rhyme the poem and this piece of translation is just a exeption to diversify your styles.