《织女怨》- 晚春轩主

自娱自乐

原帖由 青衫来客 于 2009-7-24 19:55:00 发表
It is just my  personal understanding and preference. I know it is the case that sometimes we feel uneasy when not rhyming, no matter translating or writing a poem. I know you can rhyme the poem and t......

:P

青衫来客

原帖由 自娱自乐 于 2009-7-24 17:39:00 发表
hehehe, yeah, like a glass of water, heehehe

Albeit to be separated by the endless Milky Way is a plight,
The empathic magpies momentarily come to ease the sorrow.
We can hold each other tight in......

This version coincides with my taste and I am sure it is much better.

周道模

Yes, the second is better.

嘉木子

into the realm of poetry i steal
here  i have got a good harvest

thank you！

情长

:strong:

自娱自乐

织女怨


(晚春轩主）


茫茫河汉隔，灵鹊暂分忧。
一夕身相拥，终年泪独流。
天恩虽浩荡，旧梦太温柔。
仙界无难事，缘何少自由？



The Weaving girl’s Sorrow


To be separated by the endless Milky Way is a plight,
The magpies momentarily come to ease the sorrow.
We can hold each other tight for only one night,
Yet when alone, all year long our tears constantly flow.

The celestial benevelence seems mighty and vast,
But the old dreams, so sweet so nice, forever last.
Nothing would be impossible for the Fairy kingdom,
Nevertheless, I wonder why there's so little freedom?