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《闻天路客重回中诗论坛》
文/朱枫
梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。
注：俗人不懂格律，写此诗聊表心意。
英译一：即兴
文/朱枫  英译/自娱自乐

梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。

off-the-cuff
I heard the knocking at the door in my dream,
Startled, I rise to my feet to open the twig-door,
Wonder if it is a visitor descending from heaven,
Wow, actually, here comes my old friend.

英译二：即兴
文/朱枫  英译/青衫来客

梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。

offhand
I heard a knock at door in my dream today
Startled to open the wicket door by hand
I thought he would be from the Milky Way
unexpectedly an old friend from home land

英译三：即兴
文/朱枫  英译/自娱自乐

梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。

off-the-cuff

I heard knocking at the door in my dream,
Startled to rise, I hurry to open the door.
It must be someone from the skies, I deem,
'Hurrah! An old friend I didn't expect for!"

自娱自乐

梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。
I heard the knocking at the door in my dream,
Startled, I rise to my feet to open the twig-door,
Wonder if it is a visitor descending from heaven,
Wow, actually, here comes my old friend.   

朱枫

原帖由 自娱自乐 于 2009-8-2 8:47:00 发表
梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。
I heard the knocking at the door in my dream,
Startled, I rise to my feet to open the twig-door,
Wonder if it is a visitor descending from heaven,
Wow, actually, here

谢谢了！收藏。

青衫来客

梦闻声敲户，惊起开柴门，
疑为天上客，却是故里人。
I heard a knock at door in my dream today
Startled, to open the wicket door by hand
I thought he would be from the Milky Way
Unexpectedly an old friend from home land

自娱自乐

I heard knocking at the door in my dream,
Startled to rise, I hurry to open the door.
It must be someone from the skies, I deem,
'Hurrah! An old friend I didn't expect for!"

青衫来客

Well-done, mate.

童天鉴日

原帖由 自娱自乐 于 2009-8-2 10:12:00 发表
I heard knocking at the door in my dream,
Startled to rise, I hurry to open the door.
It must be someone from the skies, I deem,
'Hurrah! An old friend I didn't expect for!"

有趣！这个译本更符合朱枫老师的本意。

朱枫

再谢几位先生了！

朱枫

题目用《即兴》，如何译？

朱枫

Besides the formal speeches, the competition has two impromptu