To My Back Garden

嘉木子

                                      By Garmo
Sometimes i enjoy in the scenery from the window,

The autumn colors are lovely,then become mellow;

To mantle the remote corner of world,is unknow,

Those scent oppressing this burdened garden now.

The crude crystal didn't find its grace.

A snail is crawling on a brace,

To trace a blueprint for its tomorrow;

May be the new pine won't be in next morrow;

May be all beauty died in the current,with a kiss;

Though dwelled under the same roof each other,the chance we miss.

In the vision the ivy is crazily creeping;

Yet is the dream awake,or sleeping?

In my sight there's a flower,
Blooming more,dancing lower.
                                      2009.8.10

嘉木子

哈哈 不知这个算不算14行呢

宛城卧龙

这个还是请海老出山来鉴定一下
我是不懂 不敢乱说

海外逸士

在哪個跟帖中﹐自娛君對十四行詩有所說明﹐請查閱。

晓荷残梦

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-8-13 5:50:00 发表
在哪個跟帖中﹐自娛君對十四行詩有所說明﹐請查閱。

同意海外老师之意见。
如自娱自乐所言：
''A Shakespearean, or English sonnet consists of 14 lines, each line contains ten syllables, and each line is written in iambic pentameter in which a pattern of a non-emphasized syllable followed by an emphasized syllable is repeated five times. The rhyme scheme in a Shakespearean sonnet is ABAB CDCD EFEF GG in which the last two lines are a rhyming couplet.”

无城浪子

原帖由 晓荷残梦 于 2009-8-13 15:40:00 发表
[quote] 原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-8-13 5:50:00 发表
在哪個跟帖中﹐自娛君對十四行詩有所說明﹐請查閱。

同意海外老师之意见。
如自娱自乐所言：
''A Shakespearean, or English sonnet consists of 14 lines, each line contains ten syllables,  [/quote]
:P 你可以在我的诗帖子下找到

嘉木子

呵呵，知道了，谢了和

靳乾

楼主的诗，貌似一首优美的couplet.

周道模

read and thanks!

青衫来客

A great progress has been made through incessant endevor made by a talented and industrial boy who is still a student in uni.