同题翻译笔会 望天门山----李白

自娱自乐

I think I am going to use 'rip' instead.

自娱自乐

rip apart

split into parts

split sth down the middle ---sounds much better

自娱自乐

Good question, and thanks for the question!

自娱自乐

我个人认为逸士的这个版本有好些地方值得探讨。

无心剑

望天门山

Watching Mount Tianmen

李白

by Li Bai

天门中断楚江开，
碧水东流至此回。
两岸青山相对出，
孤帆一片日边来。

Mount Tianmen is split open by the Chu River,
Here east-flowing blue water is forced to linger.
The green hills on both banks run into my eyes,
A single sail is coming from afar in the sunrise.

译于2009年11月4日。

青衫来客

The Mount Tienmen has been cleaved by Yangtze River
The blue water eastwards reflows when arriving in here
Green hills on the opposite shores are towering so high
A lonely sail is looming from the remote side of the sky

草子

我的英语非常差 只能读懂 不敢妄加评论

自娱自乐

原帖由 无心剑 于 2009-11-4 16:13:00 发表
望天门山

Watching Mount Tianmen

李白

by Li Bai

天门中断楚江开，
碧水东流至此回。
两岸青山相对出，
孤帆一片日边来。

Mount Tianmen is split open by the Chu River,
Here east-flowing blue water is forced to linger.
The gre

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自娱自乐

原帖由 青衫来客 于 2009-11-4 17:14:00 发表
The Mount Tienmen has been cleaved by Yangtze River
The blue water eastwards reflows when arriving in here
Green hills on the opposite shores are towering so high
A lonely sail is looming from th......

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无心剑

"a lonely sail islooming from the remote side of the sky" 译得妙。