（古诗英译） 采薇---周.詩經

rlee

悠悠苍天，此何人哉？！

自娱自乐

呵呵呵，无心君技高一筹，呵呵呵，欣赏，学习。

自娱自乐

Thanks very much for your input, which is greatly appreciated as always.

无心剑

自娱兄谬奖，又修改了一下，请批评。

诗经·采薇

Picking Osmund (The Book of Odes)

昔我往矣，
楊柳依依。
今我來思，
雨雪霏霏。
行道迟迟，
载渴载饥。
我心伤悲，
莫知我哀。

The day when I went away,
Willows were in gentle sway.
Now I'll return home at last,
The snow falls thick and fast.
I feel the way back so long,
Thirst and hunger so strong.
My heart is drowned in grief,
But none knows it with belief.

译于2010年3月6日。

自娱自乐

昔我往矣，
楊柳依依。
今我來思，
雨雪霏霏。
行道迟迟，
载渴载饥。
我心伤悲，
莫知我哀。

When I went there,
Willow swayed in the air,
Now I return here,
Snowfall's pretty severe.
The long trip back is rare,
Thirst and hunger I have to bear.
My sad heart in many a tear,
Of which no one will hear.

海外逸士

雲天譯得最好﹐把意思都扣住了。後來居上﹐後女可畏。

自娱自乐

自娱兄谬奖，又修改了一下，请批评。

诗经·采薇

Picking Osmund (The Book of Odes)

昔我往矣，
楊柳依依。
今我來思，
雨雪霏霏。
行道迟迟，
载渴载饥。
我心伤悲，
莫知我哀。

The day when I went away,
Willows were in gentle sway.
Now I'll retu
无心剑 发表于 2010-3-6 17:12:00

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自娱自乐

借云天的美译一用...For monkeying around only...

昔我往矣、楊柳依依。
今我來思、雨雪靡靡。
行道遲遲、載渴載飢。
我心傷悲、莫知我哀。

When I left for army long ago
In breeze swayed the willow
Now back home I hurry to go
All over the place falls the snow
The endless trip's tough and slow
I feel so thirsty and starving also
My heart is filled with sorrow
But my grief who will know.

rlee

In willow'd and poplar'd breeze once I left
In sleety whistle now I home return.

自娱自乐

Very good! Please keep going...

I reckon this might be the very first time you don't quote some one's remarks or lines, right?