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铁_冰

作者：佚名

曹公当年住漏房，
举家食粥饿断肠。
红楼一朝成绝响，
四十万人有口粮。
铁冰译文：

A Sarcastic Doggerel

by anonymous author, Tr.Iceiron
The hut which Cao Xueqin lived was a leaky one;
From starvation his whole family were suffering.
As he died with his “Dream of the Red Chamber” undone,
One half million Redologists earn their living.
根据无心剑、金沙文字意见修改：
A Sarcastic Doggerel

by anonymous author, Tr.Iceiron
The hut in which Cao Xueqin lived was a leaky one;
From starvation his whole family were suffering.
As he died with his “Dream of the Red Chamber” undone,
Four hundred thousand redologists earn their living.

无心剑

欣赏铁兄佳译。
The hut in which Cao Xueqin lived was a leaky one;

铁_冰

谢谢指正。原来用where的，但总觉得不确切

铁_冰

谢谢。小兄弟在哪所大学念英文专业？

金沙文字

四十万=one half million
五十万=？
:D...............................

rlee

优秀的作家生前多贫困无名。古来无奈何，非君独伤悲。

铁_冰

谢谢金沙老板，哈哈，这个不用太精确吧？
译成one half million只是为了节省音节数。
不过现在看来，还是译成“精确“的four hundred thousand显得更加一本正经，讽刺意味更浓。

铁_冰

相比之下，莎士比亚的个人命运算不错了。

rlee

是的。他很聪明，找人庇护他。写剧本当演员赚钱糊口，写诗歌得到诗名。

周道模

满纸荒唐言，一把辛酸泪；都云作者痴，谁解其中味？
                                         ——曹雪芹