【英文诗歌】Tomb-Sweeping Day

Rhapsodia

Ok, here is the sewage in the pipeline:


The Grave   
by Rhapsodia(晚枫)

The bare board of the donkey cart
Jolts my joss sticks, paper money, my cotton coat
A shovel, a hoe and the liquor bottle
Seemingly light or heavy

The road has no end in sight
The intervals of the sun and clouds
Casually make and erase
The shadows of the donkey and the cart

I’d love to light up a bundle of the joss sticks
And let the spreading smoke
Cover the boundary between this and that world

I’d love to burn every piece of paper money
And let the ash made by the flames
Buy out all the plaques in heaven and hell

Remember that cotton coat you sew for me
And the bottle of liquor I bring
Warmed up my childhood
And marks the memory of your Qingming

How I want to embrace the grave
And give a good cry
And say a couple of words
And kowtow for three times

But your bone ash
Was cast into the river years ago

Ok, 这里的纸钱，我没想出更好的办法，第二，the shadows of the donkey and the cart 节奏不对，跟前面的不符。各位有什么高招？

自娱自乐

how about "the donkey's shadow and the cart's"?

自娱自乐

or the cart's and donkey's shadow?

Loon

纸钱, 我改成了“joss paper", 但你已经用了"joss sticks", 或也可以说 joss sticks and paper? 其它表达还有 gold paper, ghost money...

先睡了， 太晚了。

自娱自乐

回复 Loon 的帖子

Good night, sleep tight, no bugs bite. hehehe

Rhapsodia

感谢Loon君 和自娱自乐两位！得益匪浅。我改了一点，看看如何：


The Grave   
by Rhapsodia(晚枫)

The bare board of the donkey cart
Jolts my joss sticks and paper, my cotton coat
A shovel, a hoe and my liquor bottle
Seemingly light or heavy

The road has no end in sight
The intervals of the sun and clouds
Casually make and erase
The cart’s and donkey’s shadow

I’d love to light up a bundle of joss sticks
And let the spreading smoke
Cover the boundary between this and that world

I’d love to burn every piece of joss paper
And let the ash out of the flames
Buy out all the plaques in heaven and hell

Remember that cotton coat you sew for me
And the bottle of liquor I bring
Warmed up my childhood
And marks the memory of your Qingming

How I want to embrace the grave
And give a good cry
Say a couple of words
And give three resounding kowtows

But your bone ash
Was cast into the river years ago

自娱自乐

Rhapsodia 发表于 2011-4-9 15:28
感谢Loon君 和自娱自乐两位！得益匪浅。我改了一点，看看如何：

Jolts my joss sticks, paper money, my cotton coat

Two 'my's in a row? why not and cotton coat?

Loon

嗯， 我在琢磨 I'd love to 用法的微妙之处。
一、用来愉快地答应对方的请求、提议或邀请，意为：我很想(愿意)。
A: Will you come for a walk with me? 你和我一起去散步好吗?
B: Yes, I’d love to. 好，我很愿意。
四、表示希望做某事,但未能做成(其后接不定式的完成式)，意为：我真想……, 我本想……。如：
I’d love to have seen his face when he opened the letter. 我真想看到他拆信时的脸色。

晚枫君的这首诗藏在这里，是否埋没了。