【汉诗英译】 秋水伊人——潘虹

无心剑

I haven’t said “ love you”
all the time in order to love you.
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I have never said "love you"
for my love's deep in my heart

无心剑

Lover, do you know I’ve been sitting and waiting for you
in the Book of Songs for thousand years, (a thousand years, / thousands of years)
lover, we meet today as in my dream, (as what I have been dreaming of)
what in your eyesight is still a lake of tenderness (eyes)
hasn’t changed for thousand years, (that hasn't changed for a thousand years)

无心剑

与身俱来，我无法招架的
半分野性。伊人啊，
also your inherent half wild  (innate wildness)
I can’t parry. Oh, lover,  (I can't bear)

周道模

无心剑 发表于 2012-2-20 17:18
欣赏周兄双语佳作。

make me await alone? (似乎应该用wait，因为await是及物动词。)

you are right! thanks!

周道模

无心剑 发表于 2012-2-20 17:20
你怎么舍得我如此难过？
How can you bear to make me so sad?

这句简洁些！谢谢剑兄指教！

无心剑

周道模 发表于 2012-2-21 13:30
这句简洁些！谢谢剑兄指教！

周兄客气了，大家相互交流学习。