[原创]■深秋

严正

[这个贴子最后由严正在 2006/10/08 01:58pm 第 3 次编辑]<br><br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;■深秋<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;秋天深的时候，我把一切<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;都已准备停当。九月<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;牵着那匹黑暗中吐血的红马<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;我就在这里安顿下来<p> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;它接受动态或者静态<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;接受野蛮和冷，还有你的名字<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;不是谁都会有痛苦和无奈的神态<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;不是谁都会和我一样<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;老爱患相同的病，并且<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;一天要重复好几遍<br> <br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;秋天已经不能再深下去了<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;在这个世界上<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;灰暗的秋天成熟了<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;我潮湿了一辈子<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp;却只留下最后的一天<br> &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; &nbsp; 2006 9 29 衡阳

于珂

节日快乐！

严正

下面引用由于珂在 2006/09/29 06:56pm 发表的内容：<br>节日快乐！<br>

<br>问好 &nbsp;同乐啊 ：）

李兴成

我总感到严正的诗句有点乱，甚至跑题！——莫非是你写得太高深，我难以领会？——盼各位有写评论水平的作者，详细地多写点关于严正“诗歌”的评介！

严正

下面引用由李兴成在 2006/09/29 07:42pm 发表的内容：<br>我总感到严正的诗句有点乱，甚至跑题！——莫非是你写得太高深，我难以领会？——盼各位有写评论水平的作者，详细地多写点关于严正“诗歌”的评介！<br>

<br>呵呵 我是初学的 &nbsp;水平不好啊<br>以后多练并向大家学习 问好您 感谢阅读

严正

下面引用由黄尚宁在 2006/09/29 08:01pm 发表的内容：<br>我认为这首写的极高 &nbsp;痛苦的状态表现的很高明<br>看到了一种独特的感觉 &nbsp;我推荐精华<br>

<br>黄老师多批评 &nbsp;以便我提高 &nbsp;问好您：）

严正

下面引用由跳跳猪在 2006/09/29 08:30pm 发表的内容：<br>楼主想和我潮湿一辈子，呵呵<br>

<br>看懂了没有 瞎想一些什么 &nbsp;呵呵！

跳跳猪

嘿嘿，我跟你开玩笑，你生气了？<br>我也赞同黄尚宁，精华！

跳跳猪

下面引用由黄尚宁在 2006/09/29 08:01pm 发表的内容：<br>我认为这首写的极高 &nbsp;痛苦的状态表现的很高明<br>看到了一种独特的感觉 &nbsp;我推荐精华<br>

<br>是啊，鼓励一下啊

亦然

是秋天感动了诗人,还是诗人感动了秋天_____一种产生诗歌和抑郁的日子，让多愁善感的朋友沉郁而醉心！问好朋友，祝贺双节！