[8原创]白沙<石头开花>/firefly

firefly

《石头开花》
Leaving a Stone Turned
我决定
Making up my mind
一直坐下去  直到你确信
I sit to my dying day, until you make sure
真的没遗落什么
Nothing left here
白孔雀咿呀一声  飞了
In a chirp a white peacock flies
半空飘着一片羽毛  不像是从我身上拔下的
A feather flutters in the sky, from me unlike
我还在等  等石头开花
Still I’m awaiting something, something like leaving a stone turned

白沙

多谢firefly。收藏。

海外逸士

這英文跟中文相差太大了。

白沙

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2007-10-27 7:49:00 发表
這英文跟中文相差太大了。

谢谢。请海外逸士先生多指教。

雪柔

读~

童天鉴日

欣赏中,并请海外先生进一步指导,谢谢

海外逸士

The title in Chinese does not mean “Leaving a Stone Turned”.  There is an idiom in English “leave no stone unturned”.  Of course there is no such a thing as “Stone in bloom”, but since the Chinese original has such meaning, You can use it as title.
I make up my mind
To sit forever, until you are sure
Nothing left behind
In a chirp a white peacock flies
A feather flutters in the air, unlikely from me
I’m still awaiting sth, sth like stone in bloom.

白沙

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2007-10-28 5:40:00 发表
The title in Chinese does not mean “Leaving a Stone Turned”.  There is an idiom in English “leave no stone unturned”.  Of course there is no such a thing as “Stone in bloom”, but since the Chine......

感谢先生赐教，白沙也学到了许多。语言翻译中最难的也就是惯用语的用法了。对另一个民族语言的背景缺乏了解常常使我困惑。firefly和童天都是我的好朋友和兄弟，还请先生多指导。感谢。

童天鉴日

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2007-10-28 5:40:00 发表
The title in Chinese does not mean “Leaving a Stone Turned”.  There is an idiom in English “leave no stone unturned”.  Of course there is no such a thing as “Stone in bloom”, but since the Chine......

拜读,并学习
问好海外先生,谢谢悉心指导

玉车长弓

这是白沙《玫瑰园》的开篇之作，非常喜欢！这首的英文也好！问好两位！