[Original] A Call From My Parents (No.FF017)

firefly

A Call From My Parents

        
Just now father called, telling me that he got sick, which meant he failed to work in the field during the harvest. Needless to say, the tough task had to be loaded upon my mother.

Some time when I could afford to get a phone, my parents planned to have one at home to keep in touch with me. And they usually called me once a month, neither more nor less, to unload their anxiety and save some money. And each time I would be a good listener, except sometimes when complaints of family affairs might be heard from the line.

It was the simple phone that connected me with my parents, which included news, mood, and love.

周道模

failed-----fails ?      meant-----means ?      had----- has ?

月下吴山

Hot line full of love.
I wish your father be heathy soon！

firefly

thanks for your kindness
i am confused by the tense for long
simply use the simple present tense in full text

海外逸士

一般用CALL作動詞。A  CALL  FROM  MY  PARENTS
都用過去時態較好﹐因為你在敘述一件﹐在你寫這篇東西時﹐已經發生過的事。
WORK比LABOR更合適。LABOR用在這裡有中國英文味道。
第一個SOMETIME後也要加S。可說SOME  TIME  IN  THE  FUTURE。
如用ANOTHER﹐表示你父母處已有一架電話而再裝一架。按上下文﹐應用ONE。
在這裡﹐用CALLED較用RANG合適。
to meet their need of missing 沒這種說法。
SIMPLE在此﹐不知想表達什麼意思﹖

firefly

谢谢老师批阅！
疑问：
sometime 不是可以表示以前的某个时候吗
加s后就是 有时候 了 文意不对啊
simple 指简单 普通 不起眼的意思

firefly

请问什么时候该用动词phone 和ring ？

海外逸士

SOME TIME分開寫。
CALL用得較廣泛。RING或RING  ME  UP常指一次性情況。PHONE作動詞較少用。
建議﹕讀書時﹐要朗讀﹐可以得到語感。於是﹐自己寫好一篇文章﹐也要多朗讀幾
遍﹐看通順否。

安城

建议 unload 也可用 release

firefly

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2008-7-8 7:37:00 发表
SOME TIME分開寫。
CALL用得較廣泛。RING或RING  ME  UP常指一次性情況。PHONE作動詞較少用。
建議﹕讀書時﹐要朗讀﹐可以得到語感。於是﹐自己寫好一篇文章﹐也要多朗讀幾
遍﹐看通順否。

要表达过去的某个时间点
我认为是用sometime
some time 是指一个时间段吧？
谢谢!