《游华清宫》- 王士禛 (C-E)

自娱自乐

游华清宫
王士禛
骊山烟雨涤香尘，舞殿依稀又几春。
柳色年年期此处，昭阳宫内已无人。
Misty rain might have washed the perfumed rouge off around the Hill,
Several spring seasons have passed since the dancing hall became an icon.
Though every year green willows will keep coming to meet here still,
Lo, no such a creature any more inside the Zhao-Yang Palace stays on.

情长

:rose :share:

浪子遐梦

一翻译，古汉语韵味没了！遗憾也，问好老兄！

海外逸士

To the above commentor:  that's the translation. you can't find the same "tatse" in another language. We can't stop translation because of that.
To the translator:
"might have washed" is not tense we need here. just general present tense is ok.   香尘 should be the perfumed dust.  around Li Hill.
"several springs" is confusing.  better use "many a spring".
must  choose another verb to replace "meet"
no need to use "such" here
just say "dancing hall"

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2008-12-27 4:19:00 发表
"several springs" is confusing.  better use "many a spring".

Thanks for your suggestion. How about 'Several Spring Seasons"? hehehe

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2008-12-27 4:19:00 发表
must  choose another verb to replace "meet"

why? Could you please ....?
Anyhow, how about 'tryst'?

自娱自乐

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2008-12-27 4:19:00 发表
no need to use "such" here
just say "dancing hall"  

有人认为，“昭阳宫内已无人”的“人”，是指玉环也。是专指。”

自娱自乐

No such a 'dancer' any more inside ....?

海外逸士

How about 'Several Spring Seasons"?------------ok
how about 'tryst'?-------better use  "expect"
有人认为，“昭阳宫内已无人”的“人”，是指玉环也。是专指------------can it be sure?

周道模

老王去游和我去游时，都有人在。你现在去游，人更多了。
“无人”肯定指杨玉环也！