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宛城卧龙

原帖由 海外逸士 于 2009-4-21 8:07:00 发表
如果GOES只跟SHIRUP有關﹐GRASS後至少得用逗號﹐否則會把GRASS一起作主語了。這
裡最好不用謂語形式。LIKE  SNOW放在FLOWERS後較好。

LONELY是心情孤獨﹐ALONE是單身一人。

其實我現在懶得多動腦子去押韻﹐可能老了。我還是鼓勵押韻的﹐但要自然。

过来学习。

自娱自乐

原帖由 金沙文字 于 2009-4-20 14:44:00 发表
Cream covered subtilis when insects are groaning sadly

你小子真色！心术不正啊！
You may have grown up between your bloody legs, but that doesn't necessarily mean you have grown up between your freaken ears! :@

青衫来客

One poem written by an author unknown, would you like to try for fun, buddy?
七绝 山寺
山寺无人夕照红，
柳摇倩影燕迎风。
我思松下寻幽梦，
月过清溪听晚钟。

自娱自乐

原帖由 青衫来客 于 2009-4-21 15:41:00 发表
One poem written by an author unknown, would you like to try for fun, buddy?
七绝 山寺
山寺无人夕照红，
柳摇倩影燕迎风。
我思松下寻幽梦，
月过清溪听晚钟。

I deem it is yours, right?

周道模

把村夜翻成“夜村”，是否一样意啊？

自娱自乐

原帖由 周道模 于 2009-4-22 6:38:00 发表
把村夜翻成“夜村”，是否一样意啊？

你说呢？:P

青衫来客

I have to say yes. And some minutes for it?

自娱自乐

原帖由 青衫来客 于 2009-4-22 20:06:00 发表
I have to say yes. And some minutes for it?

hehehe, it is a very beautiful poem indeed, (I wish I could compose one like yours in my next life, hehehe) I like it very much, though I am not too sure if my interpretation is right or wrong, anyway, I give it a try for fun. (without any background story, I can only do it in terms of the meaning of the words in your poem)
hehe,here comes my shoddy and sloppy version for your criticism.

七绝

山寺

山寺无人夕照红，
柳摇倩影燕迎风。
我思松下寻幽梦，
月过清溪听晚钟。

The Mountain Temple

No one in sight at the temple, and so red is the sunglow,

To greet wind willow sways its elegant body like swallow.

Under the pine I yearn for my romantic dream like hell,

Even the moon over the brook listens to the night bell.

青衫君，俺这次可没逃课吧！看来你也是一个喜欢折腾的人啊！:D :D :D :P :P :P

周道模

“村夜”重点写“我”，“夜村”重点写“村”。

自娱自乐

原帖由 周道模 于 2009-4-23 7:53:00 发表
“村夜”重点写“我”，“夜村”重点写“村”。

Thanks for your input!
I know you literati loves to chew words, not like me a peasant who only loves to chew tobacco leaves, hehehe
Please tell me what is the big difference between an evening class and a class in evening?