【古诗英译】《逢雪宿芙蓉山主人》唐·刘长卿

无心剑

逢雪宿芙蓉山主人
Lodging on Lotus Hill for a Snowy Night
刘长卿
by Liu Changqing

日暮苍山远，
天寒白屋贫。
柴门闻犬吠，
风雪夜归人。
At nightfall I feel so distant of the green hill;
The thatched cottage looks stark in the chill.
I hear the dog barking at the brushwood gate;
O the host in wind and snow returns so late.

译于2007年6月3日。
At nightfall I feel farther from the green hill;
The thatched hut seems starker in the chill.
I hear the dog barking at the wooden gate;
The host against snowy wind returns so late.
改于2009年12月13日。
【普敬译本】

The setting sun makes the bleak mount so vast,
A cottage seems so bare in the cold weather cast.
Why barks the dog at the wood gate so piercingly?
Against wind and snow the master returns lurchingly.
The twilight makes the bleak mount so boundless,
In the cold weather a cottage seems so casualness.
The dog barks at the brushwood gate piercingly,
Against snowy wind  returns a traveller lurchingly.  

【自娱自乐译本】

The blue hill appears much farther at nightfall,
The thatched hut seems shabbier in a chill day.
Suddenly a dog barks at the wicket-door-way,
A traveler in the snowy wind comes forth to call.
【薛湃译本】
Far, far at dusk the mountains pale;
Drear, drear in chill the cottage stark.
At thatched gate dogs suddenly bark;
The host returns 'gainst wind and hail.

无心剑

无心剑抛砖引玉，期待着普敬兄以及其他译友给出更佳译本！

自娱自乐

欣赏二位的佳译!

自娱自乐

提问
这位‘夜归人‘到底是 ‘房东’呢还是‘投宿者’？
如果是房东的话，似乎有点说不通啊，让客人夜宿，然而自个出去‘喝老酒去了’？:P
or 难道让他自个的老婆陪睡？:D

自娱自乐

难道另有‘投宿者’？

自娱自乐

Anyway, give it a try for fun...
The blue hill appears much farther at nightfall,
The thatched hut seems shabbier in a chill day.
Suddenly a dog barks at the wicket-door-way,
A traveler in the snowy wind comes forth to call.

无心剑

见到自娱兄佳译不能不赞叹！

自娱自乐

呵呵呵，无心君过奖了，我的东西只能是自娱自乐，经不起推敲的，呵呵呵

无心剑

自娱兄，在古诗英译上，无心剑是真心佩服你，欣赏你，尤其是“自娱自乐”的境界，亦非常人所能及。

自娱自乐

我觉得我们还是多提意见的好，有助于提高，你认为呢？
薛君在这方面是行家，其实你也不差。实话实说，老金头的眼光‘毒’着呢，呵呵呵，到底是吃这碗饭的人。
我虽不是那种每次都能做到‘闻过则喜’的人，但也希望能听到反面的意见，所以你不用忌讳的。