《秋夕别岑公》英译及点评

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2009-12-28 6:15:00 发表
you r tight, but i don't think what you said is related to what we are discussing.

me tight? what do you mean by that?

自娱自乐

Well, of course, it is related to what we are discussing.

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铁评9：向译文3的简炼看齐，不错。音韵和谐，因韵害义不严重。autumn boon很有特色，但月光算不上boon，因此译文第2行末应改成冒号，把第3、4行作为“autumn boon”的具体内容。其他缺陷前已述及，不赘。

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自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2009-12-28 6:05:00 发表
6，我不明白你把boon和shed的释义列出做啥？我又没质疑“拟人”修辞。我前边只是要求“请说说a moon比the moon更有诗意的根据”。
7，你的改译还应把标点改好，不要一逗到底，成为run-on句。

hehehe, as i said it it just my shoddy and sloppy one for fun, i never give it a rap, heheh

as for why 'a moon' is ok to be in the version, well, i think i have had my say...hehhe

cheers

铁_冰

That's the difference between our opinions.

I take "每从风雨后，来照别离人" as "what the BOON is", but you just take "the moonlight" as that.

铁_冰

【appreciation of verse or poetry is above all recognizing, through the ordinary process of reading , the theme and approach, the thought and feeling of the work】

This is a general desciption, but doesn't help to solve our disagreement.

自娱自乐

Do we have to solve our disagreement? hehehe

Let us all get a life, hehehe

live and let live

:Z

铁_冰

I am interested in disclosing by discussing, but not dissolving disagreement.

自娱自乐

Here comes a real stuff called iron ice,
Many people ask "hey, what is the price?'
There is no price tag,
All you need is a bag,
So he will fill it with a lot of advice.

:Z

自娱自乐

还有这首也请你翻译一下，谢谢！哈哈哈

铁_冰

哈哈，有语法错误，不翻也罢。