七律 陪友人登二龙山赏五花秋

青衫来客

斜阳笼岫理诗怀，
画里秋光任意裁。
天壮西风送鹤远，
岭推红叶奉霞来。
清江荡碧星槎去，
阔野流金陶菊开。
三径倩谁寻五柳，
此时心事不须猜。

I unscramble my poetic mood when the sunset envelops the hill
The fall landscape like paintings can be enjoyed at my own will
The grand heavens aid the west wind in blowing the crane away
The mount  pushes to show maple leaves like red clouds'display
The divine raft floats afar in the green water of the surging river
The hermit’s chrysanthemum in the field is in the golden flower
Whom can I ask to find out the owner of bloom in the seclusion
It is no need at present to work out my thoughts with conclusion

周道模

请问青衫君：“五花秋”是什么意思？
英文的格律化望而叹之啊。

青衫来客

谢道模兄雅鉴！黑龙江山区的秋天树叶色彩斑斓，此时的山被称为无花山，秋也被成为五花秋。

红色翡翠

AABB  AABB吗？
嘿嘿 我喜欢你中文写的那个哦

周道模

原帖由 青衫来客 于 2009-10-29 13:17:00 发表
谢道模兄雅鉴！黑龙江山区的秋天树叶色彩斑斓，此时的山被称为无花山，秋也被成为五花秋。

谢青衫君的解答，懂了。五花山。五花秋。

齐寒

好诗好译
the green water of the surging river略感不谐
the sunset envelops the hill 形象生动，足见功力
尤喜最后两句
Whom can I ask to find out the owner of bloom in the seclusion
It is no need at present to work out my thoughts with conclusion
仿佛此中有真义，欲辩已忘言

无心剑

欣赏，学习。

无心剑

陪友人登二龙山赏五花秋
Enjoying Flowery Autumn on Mt. Erlong with My Friends
青衫来客
by Qingshan Laike
斜阳笼岫理诗怀，
画里秋光任意裁。
天壮西风送鹤远，
岭推红叶奉霞来。
清江荡碧星槎去，
阔野流金陶菊开。
三径倩谁寻五柳，
此时心事不须猜。
I settle my poetic heart when the sunset veils the hill,
Autumn scenery in the picture can be trimmed at will.
The heaven helps the west wind blow the crane away,
The ridge pushes maple leaves like red clouds on display.
The divine raft floats far on the waves of the river green,
Hermit Tao's chrysanthemum in the golden field is seen.
O, the hut of the Five-Willow hermit, where could I find?
Now there is no need to surmise the desire in my mind.
译于2009年10月30日。

金沙文字

刀法整齐。青衫刀客也！

自娱自乐

原帖由 无心剑 于 2009-10-30 9:28:00 发表
O, the hut of the Five-Willow hermit, where could I find?
Now there is no need to surmise the desire in my mind.

Humdinger!