【转帖·讨论】 江枫先生是如何误译狄金森的？

自娱自乐

What do you think of my clumsy line?

Wild oats! wild oats!
Swimming swiftly along the canal
Leading to the grassy cradle...

自娱自乐

here luxury means lust...

自娱自乐

hehehe, guess what? Miss dream would definitely love it...hehehe, :P

rlee

喜欢！

金沙文字

需要会诊。

rlee

恩，brainstorm.

金沙文字

【评论】
As players at the keys
player(s)译成“演奏者”才合适，译成“琴师”，毫无道理。江译全篇搞成了对音乐演奏的描写。
既然用了as，诗的客体就不宜再指向player.
迪金森这个骚婆娘，把钢琴演奏过程与她自己疯狂作爱过程两段录像巧妙地糅合在一起，创作了这首歪诗。其手法叫做“双意象重合”（暂时命名）。

自娱自乐

【评论】
As players at the keys
player(s)译成“演奏者”才合适，译成“琴师”，毫无道理。江译全篇搞成了对音乐演奏的描写，驴头不对马嘴！
既然用了as，诗的客体就不宜再指向player.
迪金森这个骚婆娘，把钢琴演奏过程与她自己疯狂作爱过程两段录像巧妙地糅合在一起，创作了这首歪诗。其手法叫做“双意象重合”（暂时命名）。
大侠们不妨观赏一下playboy频道，
金沙文字 发表于 2010-3-18 9:01:00

老金，你说这话又根据吗？

rlee

金沙的理解很有趣。我想说，做爱和弹琴是有区别的。做爱时男女配合，而弹琴呢，弹奏者主动，听众被动。这是我个人的理解。

莎翁的十四行里有一段很黄很暴力，很傻很天真的性爱心理描写。很真实！

The expense of spirit in a waste of shame
Is lust in action: and till action, lust
Is perjur’d, murderous, bloody, full of blame,
Savage, extreme, rude, cruel, not to trust;
Enjoy’d no sooner but despised straight;
Past reason hunted; and no sooner had,
Past reason hated, as a swallow’d bait,
On purpose laid to make the taker mad:
Mad in pursuit and in possession so;
Had, having, and in quest, to have extreme;
A bliss in proof,— and prov’d, a very woe;
Before, a joy propos’d; behind a dream.
All this the world well knows; yet none knows well
To shun the heaven that leads men to this hell.

自娱自乐

Compensation

For each ecstatic instant
We must an anguish pay
In keen and quivering ratio
To the ecstasy.

For each beloved hour
Sharp pittances of years,
Bitter contested farthings
And coffers heaped with tears.


李氏比亚，能否提供中文版本？ 谢谢!