【古诗英译】锦瑟 李商隐

bluesabre

锦瑟  李商隐
Exquisite Zither
锦瑟无端五十弦，
一弦一柱思华年。
Why does the exquisite zither have fifty strings?
Each string stirs up my memories of the past springs!
庄生晓梦迷蝴蝶，
望帝春心托杜鹃。
The sage Zhuangzi was lost in his dreaming of being a butterfly,
Emperor Wang reposed his heart in cuckoos which sadly fly.
沧海月明珠有泪，
蓝田日暖玉生烟
Pearls are sad teardrops on the sea alive with moonlight,
At Lantian, the jade emits mist under the sun bright!
此情可待成追忆，
只是当时已惘然
Alas, now I call the past to mind;
Just then, no trace I could find!

无心剑

很喜欢你的译！

bluesabre

哈哈，多谢无心剑兄欣赏！

Rhapsodia

bluesabre， 你好。这首翻译得不错，有韵味。因为我一直不敢碰“庄生晓梦迷蝴蝶，
望帝春心托杜鹃”这两句，怕把典故翻走形了，就束之高阁了。学习您的译法，给我不少启发。就是稍微长了点（好像一个17音节，一个15音节，if I am right)。其实剑兄最擅长豆腐块，我希望能看到剑兄的豆腐块翻译！（呵呵，豆腐块是指长短整齐的诗歌格式。）

bluesabre

回：Rhapsodia
呵呵，阁下说得在理！除过尾联，其他都有些冗长了。原诗意象繁复多变，感情细腻缠绵，但传达的却还是一种水中望月、雾里看花的感觉。才力有限，有时间再琢磨。

周道模

学习各位。

自娱自乐

Well, inspired by the bluesabre's nice version, I also give it a try for fun...rocks and stones are welcome!
锦瑟  李商隐
Lustrous Zither

锦瑟无端五十弦，
一弦一柱思华年。
The luster zither does have fifty strings, yet why?
And each string plucks each of the chords of my past sigh.
庄生晓梦迷蝴蝶，
望帝春心托杜鹃。
Sage Zhuang* bewildered by his dream of butterfly,
King Wang* incarnat'd in cuckoos that sadly cry.
沧海月明珠有泪，
蓝田日暖玉生烟。
On the moonlit open sea pearls are tears from eye,
At Lantian, the jade veiled by mist, though the sun’s nigh.
此情可待成追忆，
只是当时已惘然。
Alas, it’s all over, though it is hard to die,
The traces then I'd now hardly identify.

无心剑

译得真是漂亮！欣赏！

自娱自乐

谢谢剑君的勉励，不过这首典故太多，心里没底，来还是提提意见和建议吧。

Rhapsodia

普敬君，音节划分我有点不同意见：
Why does/ the pret-/ty zi-/ther have / fifty / strings?
Each string/ each stop /was bear-/ing my /past springs!
Zhuangzi/ dreamed of/ fly /ing as /butter- / fly,
The king’ / affec- /tion was / leaved （left） to / the cu-/ckoo’s sigh.
the pearls / were tea- /ring，the / vast sea/ bathed in /the moon /light ,
the Lan/ tian jade / emit / mist un- /der the / sun bright
How can/ I re-/call this /view in/ my mind？
By then/, it was/ complete-/ly un-/defined.