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发表于 2011-1-11 09:15:33
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呵呵，下面这几段话老早就写完了，但一直发不了。
“惘然”有惆怅难言的意思、也有虚空空幻的意思。我是按后者理解的。所以才译为no traces。颈联上句暗用鲛人夜泣的典故，怎么说都嫌直白了。与原诗的基调稍显不合。这个典故应该加批注。呵呵，俺贴一下泰南和许渊冲的版本：
说实话，好几个版本里面的梦都是daydream，这固然给人一种迷离的感觉，但却有种狂躁不安的意味，和原诗“晓梦”相差甚远。许渊冲moment这个词还用得好，让人想起林语堂的Moment in Peking了。往事如烟，都不过是一场春梦而已。其实李商隐此诗通篇都是迷离的意象，怅惘的情怀。要把这种感觉和诗意准确地用英语表达出来的确太难！
JeweledZither
Vain are the jeweled zither’sfifty strings:
Each string, each stop, bears vanished things.
The sage of his loved butterflies day-dreaming;
The king that signed to his soul into a bird;
Tears that are pearls, in ocean moonlight streaming;
Jade mists the sun distils from Sapphire Sward;
Why need their memory to recall today?—
A day was their, which is passed away.
I wonder why my inlaid harp has fifty strings,
Each with its flower-like fret an interval of youth.
The sage Chuangzi is day-dreaming, bewitched by butterflies,
The spring-heart of Emperor Wang is crying in a cuckoo,
Mermen weep their pearly tears down a moon-green sea,
Blue fields are breathing their jade to the sun....
And a moment that ought to have lasted for ever
Has come and gone before I knew. |
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发表于 2011-1-9 12:09:27
(a beautifully made iambic hexameter line !) 
---------- each my past spring 不妥，each of my past spring ?) (broken foot. need one more syllable to make a 6 foot line or take one syllable out for a 5 foot line. To make an iambic line, the first foot has to be an iambic one. )
这也行？太佩服了……还押了韵呢……问好碧化涛兄。