春夜喜雨（唐）杜甫

自娱自乐

Xue's version is always good in its own way, and I like his 'dawn sees...' which is slightly better than my one ' I'll see...'

铁_冰

I agree with you. "Dawn sees" is, not only "literally" closer to the original text, but also is more poetic, than "I see" which was employed by you and Mr. Wuxin.

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2010-1-1 7:42:00 发表
杀自娱兄的译文：

Country roads and clouds are cloaked in dark,
.

Well, it is ok to omit it.

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2010-1-1 8:08:00 发表
I agree with you. "Dawn sees" is, not only "literally" closer to the original text, but also is more poetic, than "I see" which was employed by you and Mr. Wuxin.

And you too, hehehe,

自娱自乐

Good rain tells the time right Vs good rain knows the time right

Why do we have to use the same word - know?

I have to disagree with such a competition for over-simplicity to the dtriment of diversity of beautiful expressions and rhythms.

无心剑

呵呵，女人苗条一点是好的，但是太苗条，弄成bony就大大地不好了。

自娱自乐

无心君比喻得好，诗就是一美人。女人要丰满才能有魅力，一首诗同样如此。

铁_冰

你们都是在论诗，而不是论译诗。
原诗苗条，译诗就不能丰满。

无心剑

抱着丰满的美人，那感觉才是美呢！O(∩_∩)O~  看着瘦骨嶙峋的美人，哪会有什么性致哦！一首漂亮的诗，也应丰满，不能瘦骨嶙峋。

无心剑

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2010-1-1 13:07:00 发表
你们都是在论诗，而不是论译诗。
原诗苗条，译诗就不能丰满。

译诗应尽量依着原诗，但是不可能完全形似呀。对于有些苗条的诗，有时为了更好地意似，译诗也不得不弄得比较丰满才行。