【古诗英译】《答人》唐·太上隐者

无心剑

incidentally under this pine tree,
sleeping, a rock pillows me.

自娱兄，a rock 成了 sleeping 的逻辑主语，好像不对吧！

自娱自乐

well, it is confusing.

if a rock pillows my head means a rock is used as a pillow by me, why couldn't a rock pillow me?

Anyway, I change it into 'a rock as a pillow by me'

无心剑

"a rock pillows me”与"a rock pillows my head"都对的。
"sleeping, a rock pillows me." 谁在sleeping？逻辑主语是a rock，成了石头在sleeping，而不是“我”在sleeping。

自娱自乐

Ok, I'd say 'sleeping, i let a rock pillow me.'

yep, you are right about it.

铁_冰

再与剑兄赛减肥：

最新剑译：
I come under this pine at will,
Sleeping with a rock as pillow.
There's no calendar on the hill,
What winter ends I don't know.

最新朕译：
I come sleeping by a pine tree;
The rock pillows me carefree.
In hills deep no calendar here,
Winter ends not telling the year.

比较：
剑译：Words:25; letters with punctuations: 103; letters including spaces: 127; syllables: 31
朕译：Words:24; letters with punctuations: 104; letters including spaces: 127; syllables: 31

自娱自乐

呵呵呵，在减下去就面目全非了，呵呵呵

自娱自乐

I come sleeping by a pine tree;
The rock pillows me carefree.
In hills deep no calendar here,
Winter ends not telling the year.


sleeping under this pine
a rock as a pillow, fine
no calendar in hill
winter ends, which age, nil


19 words, hehehe

无心剑

呵呵，自娱译本最苗条！典型的骨干美人哈！

第一句是个无主分词短语，改成"I sleep under this pine"或许要好点吧。

铁_冰

I sleep by this pine
Pillowing a rock fine
no calendar in hill
winter ends; year? nil.


17 words

无心剑

呵呵，大家争做骨感美人呀！营养不良，瘦骨嶙峋啦！O(∩_∩)O~