【汉英微型诗】 秋夜湖畔

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2009-12-24 0:56:00 发表
风摇水中月
坐听对岸古筝乐
秋虫草丛学

The moon plays with ripples the breezes bring,
I sit listening, the zither tunes on the other bank ring,
Autumn insects in grass mimic to sing.

Honestly, it is a very good version.

Thank you so much for bringing so much pleasure for all of us! hehehe

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2009-12-24 0:33:00 发表
Facing the other side, I sit enjoying the tune of zither,读不出音乐是来自对岸
.

Ok, how about 'from the other side, blah...blah...'?

能读出来吗？嗬嗬嗬

自娱自乐

风摇水中月
坐听对岸古筝乐
秋虫草丛学


The moon in the water the winds wave,
The lute tune from the other side I sit to crave,
Insects in grass mimic the crooning clave.

铁_冰

放着贴切对等的the other bank不用，为何非得说the other side？

铁_冰

(in) the water 是特指湖水，不同于 in water——既然autumn可省（因为标题有），那么the也可省，原因一样：标题有lakeside，此处water就是指湖水。

The lute tune from the other side I sit to crave, ——crave?
Insects in grass mimic the crooning clave. ——clave?

铁_冰

秋夜湖畔
周道模

风摇水中月
坐听对岸古筝乐
秋虫草丛学

Autumn Night at Lakeside
Words by Zhou Daomo, Tr. Iceiron

The moon wavers in ripples the breeze brings,
I sit listening, the zither on the other bank rings,
Insects in grass mimic the strings.

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2009-12-24 6:25:00 发表
(in) the water 是特指湖水，不同于 in water——既然autumn可省（因为标题有），那么the也可省，原因一样：标题有lakeside，此处water就是指湖水。

The lute tune from the other side I sit to crave, ——crave?
Insects in grass mimic the crooning clave. ——cl

Well, not exactly the same, my dear friend.

Found in dictionary: English > English.

clave noun

• one of a pair of wooden sticks that are hit together to make a sound
• a rhythm that forms the basis of Latin music

• craves
• 
  If you crave something, you want to have it very much.

• There may be certain times of day when smokers crave their cigarette. V n
• You may be craving for some fresh air. V + 'for' Also V to-inf

So, when a person sits there enjoying some music from the other side of the lake, I reckon he must be craving for it, not right? hehehe

铁_冰

Thank you telling me about "clave"...

自娱自乐

原帖由 铁_冰 于 2009-12-24 6:46:00 发表
Thank you telling me about "clave"...

We say 'thank you FOR telling me...' hehehe

自娱自乐

铁皇上，吃饱睡足了，呵呵呵，