【古诗英译】李白《静夜思》，请各位批改、附译

自娱自乐

luna old,想到中国民间有月老之说……
问题是老外有没有这一说法呢？

自娱自乐

I peer into the Luna old,

peer into distance ---那是因为太远看不清，所以使劲看，可是你版本的月亮如此耀眼，还有这必要吗？难道是暗指李太白酒醉后，他醉眼腥松？

无心剑

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月亮女神是年轻漂亮的吧？
   

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其实，用"watch"或"gaze at"就行了。

   

木樨黄谷

学习，提起

Louisa

“Moonlight” 用“glare” 不妥，“full moon” 或 “bright moon” 用“glare”.
“droop” 用得好，不仅有“低下头”的意思，也显示了诗人因思乡而惆怅样子。

下面是我的拙作：
On A Quiet MoonNight

My bed ahead, the moonbeam shimmers around,
Like the hoar frost lying upon the ground.
I lift myself to watch the full moon under dome,
And, drop my head at the dream of my home.

金沙文字

小朋友们啊，“床”千万不能翻译成bed......

lengshan

各位点评言之有理，多谢！真的很佩服各位的功力。再修改如下：

李白：《静夜思》

床前明月光，
疑是地上霜。
举头望明月，
低头思故乡。

Homesick on a Moony Night

Afore my bed, a full moon glares cold ,
I’ve mistaken it for frost on the ground.
Chin up, I peer into the Luna bold,
Head drooped, I’m in nostalgia drowned.

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moonlight glares cold （无双引号）

google 后所得。。。


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