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江雪
柳宗元
千山鸟飞绝，
万径人踪灭。
孤舟蓑笠翁，
独钓寒江雪。
River Snowbound
O'er myriad mountains many a bird is of its flight deprived.
Upon endless trails e'en a human is with his trace unfound.
While the old man, in both a palm-bark cape and a bamboo hat,
Sits on the lone boat, and angles on the cold river snowbound.
小弟真正把它译成抑扬五步格了：
Snow on River
In hills upon the hills no bird in flight.
From trail to trail no human trace in sight.
On boat, a straw-cloak'd man, alone and old,
Is fishing mid the snowy river cold.
小弟参详了西方和各位佳译，又修改如下：
River Snow
A thousand hills—no bird’s flight.
A million trails—no man’s trace.
Single boat. Straw poncho. An old man
Fishing by himself: ice river, snow.
如果换成格律：
A thousand hills--the birds all go.
A million trails--no trace of man.
The boat. Bamboo-leaved cape. A man
In fishing hour: ice river, snow.
这首诗比较特殊，无论用英文句子怎么凑，也不能凑出那种境界来，所以可“格外开恩”，外国读者也不会因为这首译诗不符格律，而对中国格律诗产生曲解，相反，他们会陶醉于这种中国特有的独韵。如要格律，我选择了许渊冲的版本：
Fishing in Snow
From hill to hill no bird in flight,
From path to path no man in sight.
A straw-cloak'd man afloat, behold!
Is fishing snow on river cold.
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